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Narutoverse: Cultivation Style
Its all in the title folks. Our hero Lin Feng transcends his own world and lands up in Narutoverse. He tries to gain as much power from the world as possible so that he can impact the barriers of a higher tier world. As he goes about snatching stuff and occasionally creating beautiful buildings... he's from the Grand Architecture Sect after all,,, he pisses off the locals who rise spiritedly in revolt. How does he deal with his own mess? Read on to find out. Not a mass murdering OP MC fic... if that's your thing. He will struggle with his morality. Discord server
8 183Story of a Killer
Damon Jaeger had always known he was different. Yeah, he was more talented than others his age and even older. Yeah, he could learn things and remember them after a few glances. But he knew he was even more different. He was a Killer. He wanted to hurt people. Or at least he wanted to. Damon finally let loose and hurt a group of people who he felt deserved it. And because of that, an Organization found out about his knack for violence and killing, and they wanted to recruit him. Join Damon as he gets trained to become a Killer and tries to stay himself along the arduous journey. (Author Note: Grammar may or may not be quite shit, so please go easy on me. Also, the story may come across as edgy, so sorry about that. Oh and I don't own the cover photo either, I picked it up off of Google~)
8 262Mana Pool
Not all is what it seems when an asteroid, coincidently, crashes into the Pacific Ocean on December 21, 2012, bringing forth a mysterious wave of change on the world. The human population slowly transforms into magical beings, pitting everybody against each other on religion and race than ever before. Scott Dunne and Katie Walsh are the newly transformed, called terrans, and must survive to get home. But the earth is not alone. An alien battle group’s member Jaruka Teal is caught in the event and in doing so, the earth more threatening than before, and his friends must find a way to rescue him. It’s up to Jaruka, Scott and Katie to work together and get to safety before the inevitable becomes their fate. What would you do if you have six hours of humanity left?
8 224Rising World 2
Vonn the Engineer is an Earthman, sent to a magical kingdom just as its technology is starting to take off. With weapons and tools of his own design, he sets out not to conquer but to build. In his first year of this new life he's used the arcane rules of the "System" to earn spells and other powers. He researches dungeons, crystals, engines and more. What long-term impact will he have as he works toward fame and fortune? This book is a sequel to "Rising World", which is available on Amazon at https://www.royalroad.com/amazon/B09H5CQSX5 and (partly) on RR at https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/43182/rising-world. Posting M-W-F.
8 197They expect me to be a what??
A shy awkward gamer girl from Earth is transported to a mysterious fantasy world by a Goddess, where she must learn to fight monsters, gods, and a misogynistic culture. At 17, she had never even kissed a boy, but now has multiple suitors for her hand, including the crown prince, all expecting her to be something she’s not. But how can one girl overcome thousands of years of culture and stop a war between gods and the forces of darkness no one had seen in a millennium? Note: This is OG work I have created that is not based on any other sources or known characters. Please enjoy! I also have a new discord for people who are enjoying the story to come together and chill! Link to the Eitania discord: https://discord.gg/zm2uWQWbJc
8 155In your hands (vkook)
داستان ما دربارهی جئون جانگکوک پسری پاک و مظلوم و کیم تهیونگ رییس بزرگترین باند مافیای سئول که از قضا عاشق و دلباخته ی جئون جانگکوک داستان ماست. تهیونگ بعد از اعتراف به جانگکوک به عنوان دوست پسر رسمیش شناخته میشه ولی.........چی میشه اگه جانگکوک شغل واقعیه تهیونگ رو بفهمه و همه چی از هم بپاشه و جانگکوک دیگه تهیونگ رو نخواد؟؟؟؟؟؟؟ به نظرتون تهیونگ دست برمیداره؟؟؟معلومه که نه......کیم تهیونگ هیچوقت چیزی که ماله خودشه رو از دست نمیده.جانگکوک سعی میکنه خودش رو نجات بده ولی اگه فقط خودش بود این قضیه امکان داشت.ولی الان که پای یه بچه وسطه چی؟؟؟؟؟؟درسته ....... بچه ی تهیونگ و جانگکوک • نام فیک : in your hands • ژانر : امپرگ ، مافیایی ، انگست ، اسمات • نویسنده : melina• روز های اپ : یکشنبه ها / چهارشنبه ها•کاپل : دوورژن kookv و vkook
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