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I am not a professional critic, what you will be reading on the next pages are solely based on my own opinion and perspective.
this is a critique shop, not a review, sugarcoating, nor a critic shop. if you are looking for someone that will spoon feed you some sugarcoated words, then you are in the wrong place. because I would rather offer a destructive one instead of that.
just a self-proclaimed critic that started accepting requests way back September 2020, because of the motivation to share my knowledge about writing, and at the same time, improve my skills in critiquing.
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A Gun in a Dungeon
Ashé Crow stumbles upon the City of Agartha, The City with a Dungeon filled with monsters, adventuring is a full-time job, and killing monsters earns you money. Born with the peculiar trait of natural curiosity and his wits. He is borderline obsessed with creating a weapon that would help him uncover the dark mysteries of the Dungeon itself. If there's no rules about how to kill the monstrosities that dwell on the bottom pits, then inventing a gun would be a good idea, right?
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Alomiriya
Karin is just a regular 18 year old girl in her senior year of high school. Sure, she might be a tad dreamy, but other than that, she's fairly unremarkable. That is, until her hometown one day gets attacked by a real-life dragon. On that same day, Karin meets a talking butterfly named Papiyon, who grants her the ability to transform into a fairy! Not only that, but she has to find four other girls with similar abilities to help her with her quest to save not only Earth, but also another world that lays far, far away... 🌸🌸🌸 This story adapts the Japanese-inspired Magical Girl genre to prose form.
8 85 - In Serial12 Chapters
Grey [HIATUS]
I was originally fueled by anger and disdain to write this and looking back, most of what I wrote for this story was unplanned and a bit trashy. I kinda stopped having ideas for this, so I stopped in the end. If you're looking at this right now, you probably shouldn't read this because it's only 12 crappy chapters in and yeah... Sorry to the people who might've liked this. (Maybe one day I'll continue this, but for now, I have other plans) Grey, a prince, is unsure about what to do when he starts running away from an enemy beast tamer. He's unsure on what to do now that his father, the king, is dead. In the forest alone, he'll discover a small companion and a rogue. Together will they figure a way to take back Grey's kingdom? Or will they just die in vain? Let's be honest here, most of you probably like the fox aspect of the story the most. (BTW the cover design is made by me. Terrible, I know) I'm kind of done with writing bs descriptions that I might change in the future, plus I'm not very good with being thoughtful with quotes and stuff like that. I just write what pops into my mind, which is usually stupid things. So the description may or may not be accurate so I've changed it to being very vague.
8 144 - In Serial6 Chapters
The Beauty Of The End
William was abandoned by his family and left with a mother who detests him. He is forced into a life of crime, stealing just to feed his mother and himself. But that changes when he's given an opportunity to turn over a new leaf in a world of magic, war and tragedy. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- The Beauty Of The End takes place in a fantasy medieval world where magic exists in multiple forms. William is a boy abandoned by his family and left with a mother who detests him, and at a young age is forced into crime just to feed the both of them. But one day he is visited by a knight order who tell him he has potential for magic. Listening to their words, he leaves to start a new life and train to become a mage like them. The Beauty Of The End updates every day and I'm hoping to push out 100+ chapters consisting off, at the minimum, five arcs. Sometimes there might be double uploads to make up for a break I might've taken. I have most of the story planned out in my head and am just writing down where I think the story should go. I have planned up to arc 2 and maybe some ideas for 3, but that's about it. Thoughts and criticism are appreciated, there's obviously going to be grammar and maybe spelling mistakes that'll I'll try to spot and fix. I might occasionally post chapters that explain certain parts of the world, e.g. lore, countries, organizations, species, magic etc.
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SteelStar
After years of waiting, Andy Gatlin is ready to follow in his father’s footsteps and become a superhero. His first day goes great at first, but then tragedy strikes when a veteran superhero, Spectramancer, loses control of his powers and goes on a rage fueled rampage. Not knowing what caused this well respected hero to go berserk, Andy tries everything he can to stop the other hero without hurting him. However, Spectramancer’s rage brings him close to Andy’s home, and Andy is forced to use his most powerful attack lest Spectramancer cause untold death and destruction. This move ultimately results in the veteran hero’s death. Andy is heartbroken by what he had to do, but his troubles aren’t over. A hostile news media and an easily riled up public label this new superhero as a murderer before learning the whole story. Meanwhile, Andy learns that Spectramancer was investigating a tragic event. A few days ago, Redwell City was destroyed in a mysterious explosion, and one of the suspects deliberately triggered Spectramancer’s rage to throw the veteran superhero off his scent. Armed with his knowledge, Any vows to get to the bottom of what happened, learn why Spectramancer’s rage was set off, and bring whoever destroyed Redwell City to justice. Andy will face supervillains, shadowy government agents, corporate spies, and angry news reporters in his quest to learn the truth and hopefully clear his name in the process. This is the story of a new superhero. A hero called SteelStar.
8 141 - In Serial13 Chapters
Vast Martial World
"What? A simulation based on asian webnovels? I don't know man, I like sims but... Resource management? Limited influence? An incredibly reactive AI? I mean that sounds great, but... Alright, I'll try it, but since you were beta, you need to give me all the tips you know. What's it called again? Vast Martial World...? Ugh, let's get this over with..."
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