《Avneil - being with you》past!
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so guys I am here with my next update....
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here we go..
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after the pooja finished everyone went to their respective rooms.....
in sweata and prakash room....
sweata:"main toh aaj bahut kush hoon..."
prakash:"haan aaj neil ne avni ke liye aapna past se bahar aa Gaya "
sweata:"haan"
prakash:"chaliye ab so jate hain..."
sweata: "main toh bahut tak gayi hoon"
they slept.....
avneil's room.....
avni entered the room and she saw neil very tenshed ...she wanted to ask what happened...but she felt that neik will be uncomfortable.....and when he is he will tell her.....she directly went take of her jewelry....on the other hand neil saw avni and understood that she wants to ask what happened to me but can't....suddenly he saw avni struggling to take out her jewelry....
neil:(going to ward her)"avni lao main tumhe help karta hoon"
avni:"it's ok neil i will manage..."
Neil:"hmmm dik raha hai kitna kar rahi ho.."
avni:(seeing neil )" neil I know tum mujhe woh wajah nahi batana chahate jiski wajah se tum tenshed ho...lekin plz ase nahi raho I cant see you like this....."
neil:"avni I am sorry mari wajah se tum tenshed ho rahi ho..."
avni:"nahi neil"
neil:(takes her to the bed ....he makes her sit and sits next to her....holding Avni's hand) "avni main ye tumhe phehele hi bata dena chahata tha lekin I just couldn't......avni I also had a past ......and it really...really hurts remembering it.....before you i had someone else in my life.....juhi..... the first time I met juhi was 5 years back.....there was a huge traffic jam and she was in an auto taking her main' s daughter to the hospital....
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flashback starts :
juhi:"plz auto ko jane di giye ..plz humhe hospital jana hai....we have to fast plz....."
man:"plz yahan jane ki jaga nahi hai aage stike laga hai ...aap apna auto dosari direction leke gayeiye...."
juhi:"yeh hai aapki insaniat....how can you be so selfish...."
Neil's point of view starts .......
I was getting out of college when I saw this girl fighting for the others to let the auto pass......I went a little close to see what happend...she was fighting for her maids daughter's life.......I went more close to help her.....
point of view ends...........
neil:"baishab aap us bacchi ke bare main sochiye plz...."
after lots of tries to convince them ....we finally did it and we took her to the hospital....
flashback ends.....
neil:"and we became friends from that day ...."
avni:" woh ase hi aachiye ke liye larti thi..."
neil:"haan woh ek dum tumhari tara thi.....kisike saath bura nahi hone deti thi..."
avni:"phir kya hua"
neil:"phir hum close friends ban Gaye......hum har rosh milte the.....ek din......
flash back starts......
juhi and Neil in a cafe talking....
neil:(excited) "juhi tumhe pata hai.....I got the application....now I am going to London In 2weeks... and I have to stay in London for 2years...."
juhi:(sad)"neil woh"
neil:"kya Hua....."
juhi:(standing up and getting down on her knees ....)" neil will you marry me ..."
neil:(shocked) "juhi woh actually..."
juhi:(sad and standing up... )"it's okay neil"(she started to go)
neil:(stopping her)"juhi I will....."(juhi hug neil)
flashback ends.....
neil:"so that how we......"
avni:"Neil ab woh Kahan hai...."
neil:(tears in his eye's)"she is very far away...now she can never come back "
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avni:(putting a hand on his shoulder) "neil per ....kaise ..."
neil:"woh .....a day before me leaving to London...we decided to meet.....she was waiting for me and I was late and than......I don't know clearly but a chor stoke her purse...she ran behind him and came in front of a car.....it was a hit and run case.....the last time I saw her....it was a dead body with a very messed up and bloody face........"
avni:(teary eyes and stood up started walking facing the wall)"neil zingagi bhi kya khel khelti hai.....jise hum pyaar karte hain use humse itna door kar deti hai....ki hum kuch kar bhi nahi sakti......I wish juhi aaj yahan pe hoti zinda hoti....."
neil:(walked an turned her towards him.....wiping her tears..)"agar....juhi hoti toh muhje tum....Mari pyaari avni kaise milti haan bolo wify...(a smile appears on her face)
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so guys I hope you like this update...
thank for the votes and comment
plz do comment and vote for this one too..
Thanks....
*one important think....this track will be different from the track in the serial.....it might have some same scene....but they will bring avneil more close....*
precap: "avni is insecure .....will neil get to know...Will she tell her feeling to Neil.....what twist will rang mehel,juhi ,pandit and vidihut bring in avneil's life...."
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