《The Bromance Scheme (boyxboy) (Editing)》Doing over this story
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Hello everyone I was thinking about doing over this story. I am not gonna change the story line or personalities of the characters but add a bit more depth to the story. Not transition so fast, let them take their time and develop deeper feelings, what do you think ? And make them a bit more respectful of women :'I. I don't mean changing the bromance scheme but taking out the slut shaming and what not.
I wrote this one when I very young and back then those things weren't really focused on but now rereading it myself. I don't think I want my characters, well in this story at least speaking about women like that :)
I want to do a bit more character development as well.Its a great idea for a book and I just want to do it better.
I would really love your opinion and some idea on what to add in and how to you think the book can in improve. I plan to write it over in a few days and would love your support :)
Darkoverlordkira
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