《Hers | ✔ | (Editing)》One Shot Results!
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Okay, yes, I am a caniving little liar, and I hate it too, but that's the problem with being extremely spontaneous and decisive.
But I thought that you guys deserved more, and that the results needed a chapter of its own - along with many of the things that I will be listing here - so please bear with me.
So, this is the chapter you have all been waiting for (It is totally fine if you weren't.) and I just wanted to give a moment of gratitude for all the one shots I have gotten.
It truly is absolutely amazing on how you guys were able to capture the essence and the very heart of the character so beautifully that it left me in such awe.
Siriusly, this has to be one of the most memorable things I have ever done in this website and there really is no one to thank but you guys, so thank you, from the bottom of my heart and the core of my soul.
And if you didn't win, please do not be upset - I will be doing plenty more of these in the future, so you can always get your chance then!
All the prizes will be done tomorrow, because it is like one in the morning here right now, and I need to sleep because I am already starting school.
(hysterically sobbing.)
And just a little warning, I will be talking about what I loved in the One Shot, so I recommend just reading the one shots mentioned here first, and then reading my thoughts!
You can find all the one shots in my reading list a m o r t e n t i a, for easier access if you wish, but yeah, these reviews contain spoilers - so read first, then come back.
So first up, we have third place, and it goes to:
Finding Lily by IlseLilo!
I loved how this one was about James, and the fact that the girl is called Lily fucked me up so bad like I almost passed out over how excited I got.
This truly was a beautiful, and James was captured so beautifully and so accurately that it almost had me at tears.
Alright, so here are my favourite quotes:
❝Your smile is like expelliarmus; simple but disarming.❞
❝I don't need the mirror of Erised to know that you're everything I desire.❞
❝Are you a golden snitch? Cause I've been seeking for something like you my whole life.❞
❝You have the portkey to my heart.❞
The Harry Potter pickup lines were real in this one ya'll, like Siriusly, I couldn't even get enough of it, and there was absolutely nothing Ron with that.
So as promised, the prizes for you love, will be:
• A follow, and a dedication on a chapter in my new book, Belle.
• An honest review and continuous voting and commenting on one of your stories.
• A week long promotion on my profile.
Alrighty, we are off with a good start, and now, second place goes to:
Hers | One Shot by !
This one you guys, was absolutely beautiful! It really showed through Aaron's character development in the most spectacular of ways, and it touched my heart and yes - I did sob.
It was so well written that you can't help but tear up and love it with every fibre of your being.
And as for my fave quotes, this one is going to be a long one:
❝She brought back the Aaron he thought was lost –gone and buried beneath the rubble of a past that hunched his shoulders forward, and filled him with doubt and bitterness.❞
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❝She brought back the Aaron whose eyes were alight with cyan, the Aaron who knew how to smile and laugh, the Aaron to whom happiness was something cherished, something he wouldn't let go.❞
❝And she stepped back and allowed him to craft the Aaron she knew was inside all along, allowed him to become the Aaron she fell in love with.❞
❝His optimism may have been dimming, and hope at this point should have been infinitesimal, but he couldn't let his positivity die out completely.❞
❝They were supposed to have a future of smiles and fiftieth wedding anniversaries and vow renewals. Rose and Aaron were supposed to be the kind of couple who loved each other until the very end; beyond their death beds, into the perpetual swirls of infinity.❞
❝I – I don't know anything about goodbyes. But – But that doesn't matter right now. Because this isn't – this isn't goodbye. I promise. This is just a...see you later. It could be a few days, a few months, a few weeks, a few–" His voice cracked with misery and a headache was forming in his head, pounding at the base of his skull. "Years, even– even decades. But I promise– I promise– I will find my way back to you. Okay, Rose? I will.❞
And as promised sweetheart, your prizes are:
• A follow, and a dedication on a chapter in my new book, Belle.
• An honest review and continuous voting and commenting on two of your stories.
• A two week long promotion on my profile.
And for the one shots that pulled bullets through my heart,
first place goes to:
Loose Ends & Laces by incalescense_ and Hers ( one shot ) by lifeless_pleasure!
Yes, you are reading that right. There are two first place winners because their entries were that perfect that I couldn't decide! It was either letting both of these phenomenal writers win, or stabbing myself to death.
Both of these one shots touched my heart and twisted by guts and raptured my kidneys in ways I never even knew. I knew my readers were phenomenal writers, and when you read these one shots, you will probably want them to rewrite Hers instead of me.
Let's start with Loose Ends & Laces by incalescense_ and my fave quotes from there!
❝It was beautiful. But beautiful was a word so foreign, so distant and so far fetched. It's word that seldom found its way to Aaron's lips, always failing to find a way into his heart.❞
❝I do admit, this is a funny meme.❞
Aaron actually said that and I fucking died.
❝Instead, Aaron knew better and chose to quietly stand – taking in the verbal abuse – taking in the fact that he was never enough.❞
❝Aaron always avoided mirrors.❞
❝Whenever he thought of, looked at, or touched her, his eyes became readable; a projection of a picturesque entanglement of words that were laced with nothing but affection.❞
❝Wait until my father hears about this.❞
❝All your insecurities, idiosyncrasies, and peculiarities.❞
And I need to address the fact that the new character introduced (Kade) reminds me so much of Sherlock, and we all know how much I love Sherlock.
AND SHE FUCKING WROTE HARRY POTTER MONOPOLY LIKE OH MY GOD I LITERALLY DIED WHEN I READ THE SCENE LIKE IT WAS ROSE AF AND I COULDN'T HANDLE HOW ACCURATE IT WAS JFDJDFJKDS.
And now onto Hers ( one shot ) by lifeless_pleasure!
❝It truly amazed me. My insensitivity. And the truly awe-inspiring ability to ignore other's feelings in their times of need.❞
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❝I relied on him to the extend that he became the backbone of the condemned society I claimed to be my future empire, and the illusional reputation I'd work so hard to build.❞
❝The tape that I could've used to pierce together wasn't sticking anymore. The long strip of sticky paper had been reduced to soggy rags by the intensity of my tears.❞
❝I never had the soft, gentle hand of my mother to guide me through life and its rough patches. Never felt the gruff scratch of my father's five o'clock shadow as he came home late from work and gave me a light forehead kiss before sneaking off to bed.❞
❝A slave could never rise to the level of its master.❞
❝Because humans make mistakes. Incredibly predictable, clumsy mistakes that acted as a trigger for a distant memory when seen by the nostalgic eye.❞
❝There were times when I'd see James react to certain things...in a way that wasn't normal for an eight year old. He wouldn't flinch at my sudden revelation or noise. He wouldn't cry when he'd get hurt, even if it was something as critical as a deep gash, And he would never pester, like normal kids.❞
❝You have to suffer silently.❞
❝It was like the gradual sunrise as it commences from beneath the horizon and eventually rises up to ignite the whole peninsula. The evil, the dark, the horrors of the night get washed away by its increasing intensity until they get completely covered by the rays of sunshine.❞
(Can you hear me sobbing.)
❝They were both the backbone of one another. When one was down the other would always be there to pick them back up. There was no gender distribution or testosterone filled masculinity. There was no restrictions or secrets or doubts.❞
❝But when it came to Rose suddenly everything was acceptable.❞
❝I stopped coming and eventually she stopped asking why.❞
❝and I felt...free.❞
She did an absolutely stunning job on writing about Damien, and she really did nail each and every single aspect of his relationship with Aaron and James, it was really amazing seeing how she managed to make the vision in my head so clear in her writing.
Yeah, I was a fucking wreck in this one, and Damien is my lil cupcake that I need to protect now.
But Damien in those Bananas In Pajamas pjs omfg shoot me please.
Siriusly you guys, these two submissions were so perfectly executed, like teach me how to write that good please.
And as promised, both of you will receive these prizes:
• A follow, and a dedication on a chapter in my new book, Belle.
• An honest review and continuous voting and commenting on all your stories.
• A month long promotion on my profile.
Did you guys really thing I was going to end here?
Nope.
I am also going to be announcing the runner ups of the whole thing, and even though there aren't any prizes involved, I just thought putting the word out there that these people write beautifully would be alright.
Third Runner Up goes to:
Adventure by exihlarates!
She really nailed it with this one, I mean Aaron, Rose and James in an amusement park? How was I supposed to pass that?
And here are my fave quotes/words that made me emotionally unstable:
❝If only she didn't have that smile, I swear I would be better at remaining angry when I'm supposed to.❞
(fdnjkfdfklfd.)
❝But there was something about the way Aaron's sky blue eyes looked under the fluorescent light bulbs of red, green and blue that made him look so ethereal that Rose couldn't stop her breath from catching.❞
❝I'm sitting with James, by the way. You're left to your own devices.❞
❝I'm going to use Silencio on James if I had a wand, stop taking the words from my mouth.❞
❝If it would earn him that breath-taking smile, he would do it over and over again.❞
❝And they didn't know it, but the stars were twinkling brightly above them, keeping their memories like a message in a bottle, so that every time they looked up at the sky, they would be reminded of a memory that would last for all eternity.❞
Thank you for this lovely entry, it was absolutely adorable to read aND CAN WE TALK ABOUT THE JAMES PROPOSAL SCENE OMFG I DIED AND FJNDFKDSNF.
AND THE HARRY POTTER SPELLS IN THIS ONE WAS SPOT ON LIKE YAAASSS AARON RULE FJDNF.
Second Runner Up goes to:
Still In The Letters by Nutella_Lover2!
This one made me legit sob because it was so heart warming and immensely emotional, so you can imagine yours truly hysterically trying not to wake up her sleeping mother.
And here are my favourite bits:
❝Hey we're here to pay Mum respect, not get angry at someone else.❞
❝Because no matter what, you live in the letters of every book I read and I will never stop reading your story.❞
aND WE NEED TO TALK ABOUT HOW OLIVER WAS THE ONE WHO TOLD THE FAM TO CALM DOWN AND THAT HE IS STILL THE MOST HEARTBROKEN LIKE THAT HIT ME IN THE FEELS SO BAD LIKE FUCK MAN WHY.
AND AARON LEFT HER A RED ROSE AND IDK IF YOU GUYS REMEMBER, BUT IN ONE OF HERS CHAPTERS, A RED ROSE MEANS ONE TRUE LOVE AND LIKE DFJKNSDKDNF.
And the fact that even Damien and James were there broke me.
Thank you for such a lovely submission, and even though it made me sob, I love you for it.
And the first Runner Up goes to:
My dweeb of a sister, Hers | A One Shot by silvrmoon!
Yes, she is my legitamite sister, and she took a lot of time to enter, and I was very happy with what she wrote.
And no, I didn't write my fave quotes, because I loved pretty much the whole thing. (And because I was too lazy at this point, but hey, she's my sister - it is completely fine if I am mean to her.)
So yeah, definitely check out her entry, it was pretty awesome saying so myself.
And yes, she is my #1 hater so
I have also decided to add in some honorable mentions!
bloomai245 (Thank you for making me James' girlfriend omfg I died.)
TheSingleMuffin (You entry was bomb af and it made me giggle loads.)
And that's a wrap!
And for those of you who don't know, I am actually writing an action book on BooktasticAssassins with my friends and it would be awesome if you guys checked it out!
It is called Trigger, and it is different to what I usually write, but I am testing the waters, and so far so good! It would mean a lot to me if you guys read it and left me your thoughts!
I am thankful for all the support, comments, votes and love I got for this story, and I know I say this all the time, but I really have no one to thank but you guys.
Thank you for the support.
Infinitely.
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