《Spirits of Eternity(A cultivation story based on spirits)》Rewrite
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Okay, so there's going to be a massive rewrite.
Either way, this was like... a testing grounds, to see how writing on RRL would go.
I'm going to delete these fictions soon. Monsters and Spirits. I'll also be making new fictions, named Monsters as Men and The Forsaken Eternity.
Spirits of Eternity will become FE(Forsaken Eternity) and Monsters as Men, well, will become Monsters as Men(Monsters as Men).
This is where my commentary is story specific-everything above is going to be copy-pasted.
Spirits will become first-person, told from the eyes of Liv and Vivian. Vivian will have a much bigger place in the story, and will be much more important than she is now. There will be more struggle in the story, and it will be actually edited. The chapters may be a bit longer, I don't know. I also plan to change much of the storyline, so it'll be a different story overall. Less loose ends.
The prologue will also change, because of reasons I will not disclose, because spoilers. There will most likely be a city arc at the beginning, when Liv is in her home city. She will also have a reason to go after the altars, instead of just doing so to vaguely increase her powers. She will actually try to stay on the downlow, make smarter decisions.
In a couple words, the story will be much better. Chapters will take longer to release, by the way.
This was like a slight foray into the forest of writing, with a lot of breaks, walking out of the forest, and going in circles around trees a couple times.
The next one will be a serious attempt to get onto the RR leaderboards and possibly publish.
Thank you
-Destroyer
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