《When I was old》Poll
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Okay, after talking with my mentor for quite an bit and meditating on the subject myself for a while, I reached a conclusion. My story need some rework. By rework, I don't mean just editing some chapters here and there or something like that, I mean restarting a new fic with the same name. Why? Well the reason are pretty obvious. My pacing, like most of you noticed, it's damn slow like hell.
Confusing events. Like tons of you said, there is tons of confusing things about my writing that you might as well skio the whole thing.
God's library, I didn't touch that thing plot wise at all. That arc after some serious revising prooved to need more than 10/15 chapters of its own. There will be down grade of power problem that will be more accentuated, but that arc need some serious revising and I'll try to not have you get the feeling of restarting over as much as I can (suggestions are welcomed here).
The profecy need some revising. I thought about it and it seems that it didnt convey what I wanted.
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Hmm I noticed that some of you guys thouggt that I skiped important details and gave important actions no explanation at all. If possible can you point some out, so that I don't do the same mistakes as in my first attempt.
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