《When I was old》Poll
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Okay, after talking with my mentor for quite an bit and meditating on the subject myself for a while, I reached a conclusion. My story need some rework. By rework, I don't mean just editing some chapters here and there or something like that, I mean restarting a new fic with the same name. Why? Well the reason are pretty obvious. My pacing, like most of you noticed, it's damn slow like hell.
Confusing events. Like tons of you said, there is tons of confusing things about my writing that you might as well skio the whole thing.
God's library, I didn't touch that thing plot wise at all. That arc after some serious revising prooved to need more than 10/15 chapters of its own. There will be down grade of power problem that will be more accentuated, but that arc need some serious revising and I'll try to not have you get the feeling of restarting over as much as I can (suggestions are welcomed here).
The profecy need some revising. I thought about it and it seems that it didnt convey what I wanted.
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Hmm I noticed that some of you guys thouggt that I skiped important details and gave important actions no explanation at all. If possible can you point some out, so that I don't do the same mistakes as in my first attempt.
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The Weirkey Chronicles
Betrayed. Murdered. Reborn. One last chance, to make it right. Theo's adventure ended with his mentor's hands around his neck. The betrayal cost him his friends, allies and everything he had built... but not his life. Though broken and powerless, Theo has one last chance to enter the Nine Worlds, wielding the knowledge and expertise of his first life. This time, he needs more than just power, he needs to unravel the deception that killed him once... and is coming for him again. Character artwork: https://i.imgur.com/CEfPC1G.jpg
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8 73Homecoming | A Chronicles of Ascension Story
When Jethen was captured by slavers, his childhood was torn from him and left shattered half a world away. When he finds himself back home decades later, by methods he does not fully understand, he finds that the life he has lived has changed him far more than he knew. In a home he no longer knows. Places and people at the same time familiar and foreign, he must decide - stay and help with his parent's business, or return to the land that remade him and the family he made there. --------- Homecoming started as just a short story to break an episode of writers block. It has since morphed well beyond that into a novel in it's own right, and may well end up with a sequel. The writing of Homecoming became a bit of a self induced challenge to improve my initial, first brush, writing quality. Each chapter was written raw, given a once over read and edit, and then posted. In this way I am forcing myself to write better from the start. I do hope you enjoy the story and will leave a comment or review, and if you see an issue, feel free to let me know as well. I know it is not nearly perfect, and it will get a full and proper edit once I am done. Never hurts to fix things along the way though. As an additional note. The story has undergone a structural rework and has been reposted in an updated structure and sequence of chapters. If you have read this story already, I invite you to do so again in this new structure.
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