《My Hermit Life》Criticism ( 4 )
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The fourth criticsism, for any new readers this is a prime time to give ideas or suggestions on how you think the story could be improved, though I doubt I have any new readers. I have done my best to improve my grammar and spelling, but I know I could still use considerable improvement. I would also like to do a poll on a new idea I have had for Solomon's newest formation the, Creation Formation. When I first thought of the CF I had intentions on Solomon just using it to create parts and whatnot to create weapons, armours, and other devices. But I had the idea of Solomon using it to create new races, I just want your guys'es opinions on if I should do that, or if it would be to OP. I could just make it to where only Loretta can create new races since she has experience, I don't really know though so if you guys could leave your opinions in the comments that would be appreciated.
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