《My Hermit Life》Criticism
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This is not a Chapter. I am making this post in hopes that all people who have read a majority of my book weill leave s comment on this post giving ideas/ suggestions/ criticisms on how my story can be improved. So any of you great people who plan to continue reading my novel. If you somehow have no suggestions then feel free to ask questions about the story if you would like. To anybody who hasnt read my story please read it before commenting, thank you.
Have a great Day from, WaterBear06
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The Tale of G.O.D.
This is the Tale of G.O.D. (And how Humanity never reached the Stars) Antioch is a sheltered being and knows little about the world. Although he harbours his own secrets, he doesn't comprehend the scale of the adventure he is about to embark on. Being locked up in a research station, he is content with his fate, but when he starts receiving strange messages, he suspects that not everything is well in his little world. When it's abruptly decided that the project has to be ended, Antioch is faced with the large world outside his prison. He won't like what he finds... and there are powers at play who would love to put the escaped subject back into the box. But as in so many tales, it's hard to close Pandora's Box once it was opened. ——————————————————————————————— Reading Order of the Multiverse-Books ———————————————————————————————
8 408A Simple Bar In The Multiverse
I'm Lucas, 30 years old and single. I went to drink with some friends that day and when I was walking home, I found some weird glowing door on a wall on which I've never seen anything before. I'm a bit ashamed to say that I instantly tried to open it. Behind it was that weird silver light which I also touched with my bare hand. Don't judge me! I was very drunk. It has nothing to do with my intelligence... Anyway, I seemed to have been transported in a magical room and an invisible female entity has just just given me an offer: Turn this bar into the best bar in the universe where you'll work forever. In exchange I would get great powers with great responsab... Wait! That's spiderman. Anyway, great powers and unlimited lifespan. I think I'll say yes... Follow the story of Lucas, the manager of the Simple Bar, while he turns this seemingly innocuous bar into one that becomes known in the entire Multiverse. Or at least in a big part of it. I mean, the Multiverse is virtually infinite, so... A part of the story will take place in the Divine Realm of the Wanderer's Realms from my first novel 'The Life of a Goddess and a Fox in the Cultivation World '. I will post 1 chapter every week at 7 p.m. EST on Saturday.
8 173A Real Life
He, who was just another average guy out there, wished for a life, where he can live it to the fullest, a real life.He, who has nothing fun to play with, wished for something interesting to happen someday.He, who wore a smiley mask to his friends despite his real feeling, wished for somebody to really understand him.The day when everything he wished for started to form up, is the day he would regret.The fourth lines was a lie.---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------If you was looking for OP MC or King of the Harem, you are reading the wrong story. In the real life, every single hero takes quite a long time to become mature, and even then, they still aren't the best of the world. Slowly learning his way forward despite all the obstacles, that is the true way to become strong.P/s 1: First time writer, and English isn't my first language, so please forgive me for any errorsP/s 2: Until I finish the drawing later, I'll use this pic on google as a temporary one.
8 207Diary of an Insomniac
The content from the diary of an individual who may be more than what he seems. It contains his thoughts, outlook on life, stories of his days, and tales of his sleepless nights. There are frequent and sudden changes in stories and mood. I am not sure what to make of it. I think there may be something wrong with him.
8 186The Noble Curse of Ookami [Previously Titled: CLOSER]
Kyuuto, born as the last generation of the Ookami clan has to deal with the clan's thousand years curse of bringing back the ancient souls into modern world. In an effort to take vengeance, he was helped by Yuukai, a man who had saved hundred of other victims of the curse in order to turn the tides of fate. They formed an army to restore order in the chaotic world created by the curse, while slowly uncovering the secrets around them. After realizing his destined enemies are his own brothers, Kyuuto met with an internal turmoil whether to continue on fighting or give up entirely.
8 267Grimm
Grimm is alone a lot, his parents aren't the responsible type. His life changes when someone else's ends. This author is bad at writing synopsis.Just a story I've been working on. Its also my first one so if you see any errors do feel free to point them out.
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