《The Start of a Unusual Life in an Alternate Reality(Soul-AR. You know like solar)》Inspiration lost
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Hey you guys, its time for another Authors Corner.
I just want to thank you guys for the help youve given and the support.
Recently there has been some major issues that have been pointed out, by both Lone(author of Lone Wanderer) and Lanelav who recently did a review on my story's main page.
First i want to adress Lones comment on the lack of personality of my side characters.
I completely agree. I feel like ive been failing to give my characters life
In the beginning of my book, they had feeling and life. Now im just putting them through the motions. I feel that ive let both the potential for my story, and all of your guys expectations down.
Recently ive gotten a job, finally. But due to this i havnt been able to find any real time, or inspiration to write in the days i have off of work.
I feel like im rushing it for you guys and am just failing.
Some people can write books with just one point of view and keep all the characters filled with life and vibrancy. Im failing at this.
I thank you Lone for your input, though from what ive seen in your book, a few of your characters are lacking personality the same as mine. I feel like you are rushing through the events in your book. I still ike your book though. Thats just my non-professional opinion at least.
Now for the recent review.
I thank you lanelav for your 2cents. It feels like a million bucks for the input youve put in.
Seriously, no sarcasm.
I do feel as well that i havnt put any major detail into their surroundings.
Also, its not that Dorian is Sadistic per say, more like vindictive towards those who scorn him and act like he is lesser than a living feeling sentient being.
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How would you like having to deal with a person who treats you like shit from the moment you meet them.
I personally hate people who do that, thats why i have as many enemies as i do. My smartassery has not helped as well.
So i wanted to emulate that through Dorian.
Now onto a discussion me and Zman were having before. Actually two different discussions.
I dont plan on making this a harem. If Dorian is going to be with multiple women, im going to have him be in actual one on one relationships with them that have meaning and can progress the story.
So no harem, just possible multiple relationships maintained at seperate times.
Now the second discussion was that THE LAST AIRBENDER MOVIE WAS CANCER.
SO ARE THE DRAGONBALL MOVIES.
AND THE PRINCE OF PERSIA MOVIE.
NONE OF THEM WENT ALONG WITH THE ORIGINAL BOOKS OR GAMES OR SHOWS.
PRINCE OF PERSIA AND DRAGONBALL WERE ESPECIALLY BAD DUE TO HOW FAR FROM THE REAL AND ORIGINAL STORIES.
i want to strangle M.Night Shamalon. How dare he.
im just hoping that the Ghost in the Shell movie wont be as bad.
But cause Scarlett Johannsen is supposed to play the MC, i dont think it will be shitty. Anyway.
Let me know if i should continue the way i am, take a break, take a break and write in a better more invested way, drop the book, or just drop the book and go onto the other ideas i have.
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