I wonder what will happen in this story?

Literally, most intros are like this.

'Hi, my name is Sapphire Magic and this is the story about how I fell in love my brother/sisters best friend. Read to find out!'

The second I read that shit, I leave.

That doesn't draw your reader in people, YOUR FUCKING PUSHING THEM AWAY.

IN FACT, YOUR ANNOYING THE SHIT OUT OF THEM!

'Read to find out!'

HELL NO.

If you tell a reader to read your story, they'll be like

YOU CANT TELL ME WHAT TO DO YOUR NOT MY MUM

I can guarantee it 100%.

THEY WILL RUN AWAY SCREAMING.

'YOU CANT TELL ME WHAT TO DO BITCH!'

But, like I said, by the title, we can work out the whole story line.

The best friend comes over to house

Main character stalks them

Gazes after them long after they left

Bumps into the at school

Blush fest

Classes

Lunch hall

Sitting with them

Walks to main characters home with them

Best friend asks on date

MC can't breath

MC nods

Best friend smiles

TEN PARAGRAPHS DESCRIBING MAKEUP AND CLOTHES

Met at romantic restaurant

Have wine and beer when they're underage.

Get drunk.

Kiss

Have sex

I don't see an inch of originality here.

AT ALL.

FOR FUCKS SAKE PEOPLE DON'T FUCKING DO IT!

DIRINK PISS MOTHERFUCKERS!