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Situation Room (John F. Kennedy Conference Room)

Another meeting has been called by Secretary of State Gerald G. Lloyd.

This time it was urgent.

"Ok everyone, I have urgent news about the Far Eastern people." Everyone was looking at Gerald with confused looks. "We launched a MQ4C-triton from the carrier, around 2000 miles away from Carnis, with a range of 14 thousand miles. We reached the area." Gerald proceeded to open several files, then opened a file which showed photos of gory nature.

Destruction, smoke, rotting bodies, dead children, decapitated bodies, etc.

Everyone was shocked. What they saw was a massacre. "We got information from the CIA that this village is named Hurga. We also intercepted some messages." Gerald proceeds to press keys on his laptop, which leads to a player on the computer, and plays, "Hello! This is Horga-II, son of Ace rider Horga, reporting, "I have spotted at least 300-500 Volandian ships." Everybody was shocked. "Volandians?" Jerry asked.

"We've identified them as savages with no morals based on their actions, and I propose we stop this threat from engulfing all of Carnis, sir," Gerald suggested.

Jerry was thinking and said, "Congress?" He asked Congress what to do, "Mr. President, I suggest we wait until these Volandians concur all of Carnis." Gerald tried to counter, but Jerry gestured for him to stop, "Because if we wait till they concur on everything, we can start our offensive." If we succeed, we will probably have the local civilians' support. Congress Fredrick had a good point. "Alright Fredrick, I agree. We will wait until these Volandians conquer all of Carnis, then we will start our offensive. This meeting is closed. "Jerry left the room, then everyone started leaving.

Carniuan-Garga border

Many knights were mobilizing, and they all set up camp in the Garga borders, alongside Calvary and wyverns.

"Watch as I slay those Volandians! They’ll have no chance against our 50 thousand knight army! " A knight shouted, and others cheered, as all of the knights were waiting for the volandians. Wyverns were patrolling the sky and land to see if volandians were sneaking up on them.

-Mana-comm tent-

Many mana-comm operators were handing out orders to all commanders when one of them shouted, "WE LOST CONTACT WITH ALL OUR WYVERNS GENERAL!" General Sharkun was shocked, "Can you contact them again?" Sharkun asked, "No sir, we lost complete mana contact with them." The general was beginning to have a dark expression, "Don’t tell me they were killed!" He thought as explosions could be heard outside.

"SIR! We need to evacuate! " A knight shouted before he was pierced by a musket bullet, "Shit!" Sharkun ran away from the tent as it exploded with a volley of fireballs from the air. He then saw the chaos, many cavalry horses lying dead with their riders. He then saw his knight charging in formation but was obliterated by a cannonball shot by an elephant. He wondered why elephants were firing cannon balls, but decided to think about it later as his life was on the line.

He then saw a knight fighting a Volandian soldier with a bayonet. Ultimately, the knight died as two soldiers with bayonets flanked him and killed him. His army was surrounded. He fell to the ground on his knees and prayed to God that he would strike the Volandians. Then he slowly lost consciousness as a musket ball pierced through his heart. He fell to the ground, with noticeable tears running from his face to the ground.

7 hours later, the same day,

"Haha, these inferiors are so easy to kill!" A musketeer shouts, "Yeah! These inferiors are nothing to us! For the Emperor! " They both clinked their glasses of tequila and drank. They were camping in the former Caniuan camp, which they defeated, and decided to camp here for the night.

Suddenly, a captured Carniuan knight jumps and falls to the ground with his hands tied, "You damn Volandians! Once our king mobilizes our counter offensive, we will decimate you! You mierda-"he was cut off by a musketeer shooting at his legs with a pistol, making him scream in pain." Dare you use our native language against us inferiors? Also, unlike your ignorant king, our emperor is very open-minded and merciful. That’s why I shot your leg and not your ugly face. Eres salvaje," the musketeer insulted the knight and called him a savage in the native language of Voland, Espaolada.

The knight growled in response, "feisty are we inferior? Not even the Gods who would accept anyone accept yo-" A light was suddenly shining in the middle of the camp. High in the sky, a round, shining circle could be seen. "What is this?" The musketeer died as an arrow hit him. It was shot from the circle. Everyone stumbled back as a man came out of the circle. A man with wings and a white dress, shining skin, and an angelic like face, was flying, "WHO ARE YOU?" "My identity is none of your business, mortals." To the surprise of the musketeers, he suddenly raised his hand, and something formed, which the musketeers recognized as a lightning bolt. "May Satan give you eternal suffering!"He shouted and threw the bolt at light speed. It decimated the Volandian camp, which was 130 x 120 x 100 meters. The shockwave could be heard 1 kilometre away from where it exploded. The blast was only 5 meters though, as the shockwave had electricity, which shocked everyone within a 200 meter radius as the shockwave began to go away.

He returned to the portal, acting as if nothing had happened, and found himself in a cloudy light world, where someone was waiting for him. "Did you complete the mission, Michael?"An unknown voice asked the unknown figure known as Michael, "I did Gabriel, now step aside. I feel morally damaged from seeing those mortals screaming," Michael said as he pushed Gabriel aside, "Pfft, you actually feel remorse for those mortals?" HAH!What a joke! " Gabriel insulted Michael and proceeded to open up a portal to his personal dimension space.

Michael had a furious look after the encounter with his brother, Gabriel, "Grr, all of them! Everyone, Ulrich, Ulrich' father, Gabriel! They're so obnoxious! " He angrily said in his mind, Michael had hated his father or God for eternity for the "wrong doings" he had done, and he actually managed to fool the planet we abandoned! On the original earth, Michael had to evacuate as the actual Gods, Sun God Yoshura, Sky God Fegele, and Tree God Garlogal, came to stop Michales' father, or known to the original earth, God.

After God escaped to Elysia, he set it up as his personal domain and enslaved everybody. Well, until the ancient empire came and annexed Michael's father's domain as their own and did stuff worse than them. They've been recovering ever since.

Then, Michael arrived at God's throne room. He could hear angels and animals singing. Then he saw his father. Yahweh, "Father." He knelt down in the presence of his father. "At ease child, did you do the task I gave you?" Yahweh asked Michael, "Yes father, I've stopped the Volandian soldiers discovering the Ancient Empires Nosgorath bomb." Yahweh was amused, "Good my child, I shall give you a gift later. I'll inform Satan that he doesn't need to worry about anyone using the Ancient Empires technology." God stands up and opens up a portal to hell, "See you later child." He walks in and the portal disappears.

Suddenly, Michael fell to the ground. He had flashbacks from when the first Nosgorath bomb was dropped into the Battle for Cacuya, the last standing continent that was being attacked by the Ancient Empire. He was fighting some kind of metal beast that injured him. Both of them exchanged attacks, but ultimately, he defeated the beast by using all his powers to create a fireball powerful enough to destroy the thing and anything in a 300 meter radius. And then he felt something rumble. He could feel it. The Ravernals were deploying those giant cylinder things that spew out fire! Though soon, he was not worried anymore as those things were only able to be launched from the Goladas islands (Carniuan Imperium) and a traitor told them that they only had an effective range of 800 miles. While it could reach space, which was an impressive feat, it wouldn't come close to reaching where he was at in a million years! Well, he was wrong. He then saw something coming from the sky; a red fireball moving very fast. It was aiming for... "J-Jesus!!!" Michael shouted as he rushed to where Jesus and his army were fighting the Ravernals, but he didn't make it. The fireball suddenly accelerated and impacted Jesus' army, forming a 50 meter fireball as hot as the sun, disintegrating Jesus and his army. Michael was pushed back by the shock wave to the ocean with tears. Out of the brothers, Jesus was the only one who cared for humans and followed good morals. Michael was inspired by Jesus to learn some sympathy for humans.

He got back to his senses before he hurt himself. Then he proceeded to go to Jesus' grave that he hid in Elysia.

Unknown to Michael, before he went back to heaven, he was being spied on by something in the earth's orbit.

—White House—

—President's bedroom—

He was currently in his bedroom with first lady Eugen Kennedy (Before marriage: Eugen Grayson). She was pregnant with Jerry's child, confirmed to be male. He named it John F, which resulted in John F G Kennedy. "Shh, it's OK Eugen, our baby will be born in two days," he said as he sat beside his pregnant wife.

"Thanks Liebling" She said, as Jerry blushed, it was rare for her to say words in her native language, German.

"How Cute!". Eugen says as Kennedy looks away, "I-Its nothin-"Before Kennedy could finish his sentence, Gerald barged into the room, "Mr. President, I have a report from the NR-"

Gerald was punched in the face by Kennedy for ruining the moment, "Can you stop barging in and knock instead?" "Sorry, Mr. President, but this is very important news, really serious news," Gerald said as he stood back up and adjusted his bow tie.Gerald said something very serious in a very serious way, with Kennedy knowing Gerald wouldn't act like this and knowing something was up.

Kennedy walks back to Eugen and kisses her on the lips, "I'll be back, Eugen. I have to tend to my duties as the president."

"Of course, darling, I understand," Eugen said with a smile and walked away.

While walking to the oval office, Kennedy tried to start the conversation. "What happened?" he asked in a serious tone. "I'll tell you once we were in the Oval office, Mr. President." Gerald responded as they reached the Oval office.

-Oval Office-

As Kennedy sat down on his chair, Gerald got a laptop and opened several files. "Here Mr. President," Kennedy was shocked by what he had seen. An Angelic Entity suddenly appeared in what looked like to be a portal, striking the Volandians with a lightning strike. "Is this some sort of joke Gerald?" Kennedy asked Gerald, as he was an atheist. "No president, the NRO does not report to us nonsense shit." Kennedy was intimidated by the unintentional intimidation of Gerald "Alright, set the nation to Defcon 3, we don't know if these angels are going to attack us or not, but they are fully capable of destroying a city and opening up portals to travel everywhere, and if needed, we can mobilize the air force in 15 minutes or less to mess up these angels," Kennedy said as Gerald nodded, "but are we sure that these angels are mortal?" "Sure would be. Take a look here. " Gerald points at a spot where Michael had a wound, and Kennedy says, "Oh, OK, alright, Gerald, I'll contact the CIA to learn more about these angels and to investigate if anyone knows what they are.

I'll also request that the CIA send every spy they have to every corner of this new world, as we need more information on whether we have an impending threat and whether we can discuss it diplomatically with them. " Gerald nodded and proceeded to leave the room. Kennedy sighed and went pale, then fell on his table, "Ughh the paper work!!!".

–Carniua–

Carniua was in a state of panic as the streets of villages began to be filled with carriages carrying people who were evacuating from the area. The economy was beginning to crumble as well as protests, riots, defectors, and traitors who joined the Volandians.

King Galahad of Carnis He could not sleep, fearing that the Volandians would raid his castle and execute him. Plus, reports were coming in every second. He was tired of it, but he couldn't surrender, as that would show his incompetence as a king. One report shocked him.

Galardis Castle, Galahad City

As Galahad was sitting in the throne room, he looked pale. When his help arrived, it was clear that he was now sleep deprived.

My king! My king! " The aid shouted, "Galahad," with a tired voice, said, "what...".

"Sir! General Ivor has left! We saw him leave with a couple hundred people in around 30-50 sloops from port! This made Galahad have all his energy back. "What! You peasant! Why didn't you stop that traitor? You've been fired, you inept jerk!! Leave now! " The king shouted, Furious about the report, the aid was quick to react and ran so fast that he would've rivaled Usain Bolt, though the shouting did something to him as he was panting like crazy now.

In the vicinity of Galahad

The Volandian 1st army, or nicknamed, Phillip National Guards, was nearing the city of Galahad with 7000 musketeers, 40 mana-elephants, 400 cavalry armed with muskets, and 40 wyverns patrolling the skies over the city that was going to feel the Volandians' wrath.

"Hey, when are we going to attack?" A musketeer asked his partner with exciting looks, "Any second now." As they were waiting, they got orders from their mana-comms, "attack." As soon as they heard that, all 7000 musketeers ran out of the forest, charging into Galahad city with mana-elephants accompanying them.

"SHIT!, KNIGHTS! CHARGE!"A mana-elephant rider noticed them charging and fired a cannonball, decimating the charging cavalry. "HAHAHA! DIE INFERIORS!" yelled a musketeer as he decapitated a man with his saber.

With this sudden surprise attack, King Galahad was advised to be evacuated, which he did comply. When he was out of the castle, he saw several wyverns hovering. "Hehe, look who we have here," the commander of the Volandian Dragon Squadron said. The king's escorts pulled their bows, but were shot with pistols by the riders.

King Galahad was horrified. He stumbled back and slipped on a big rock, landing on his butt, moving back slowly, "Look look everyone, the‘mighty’ King Galahad is stumbling back with fear in his eyes." The commander of the dragon squadron made fun of him, which infuriated him to speak, "YOU DAMN BARBARIANS, DAMN YOU! Let God strike you down with His Mighty Hands. Begone, Demo-" Before he could finish, a dragon rider shot a fireball at him, killing him instantly. King Galahad lost his consciousness in a millisecond.

This is Commander Jonas. We've exterminated the Carniuan stupid king and all that's left is to kill all the remaining military personnel who are still willing to fight. The squadron commander reports to his mana-comms, "alright commander Jonas, you can return to safe lines now. Have a nice day." The mana-comms operator responds to Commander Jonas's report, "Aight boys, I'll buy you all tequila, so let's get going!" As his squadron cheers, they head back to the safe lines.

New World's First Fleet

As Admiral Tarry was resting in the cabins, an officer knocked on the door, "Hmm-huh-huh?" He woke up to the knocks as he rubbed his eyes, "Come in!" It was a crewmate. "Sir!" he saluted, "At ease, any reports?" Tarry asked his fellow yank, "Yes sir, the Triton and All-seeing have been doing some work. All-seeing has detected 50 ships heading straight to the United States and about 1000 miles away from us."

"Just launch some hornets to deal with them. I am tired, so please let me rest. " Tarry said, tiredly, as he was really sleepy. "Well sir, our tritons' live camera feed saw that they were waving a white flag on their ship and not the usual carnis imperium flag." This made Tarry open his eyes and sit properly, "Really?" Good news! If we encounter them, please ask for their commanding officer to be here. Also, stay 15 feet away from them. I don't want to repeat the ambassador incident.” Tarry quietly said, as he had flashbacks of what happened. "Understood sir. I shall send this information to the others. " He gave a salute and left the room. “Ah, being an admiral is really stressful at times, isn't it?” Tarry gets a photo of his grandpa, Admiral Nimitz.

Galahad City

After the defeat of Carnis, Voland occupied all of its land, including all of its ports, wyvern bases, and food.

It was practically a haven for the Volandians as they could make fun of the Carnis civilians in their houses for being "weak" and

In some cases, they point their muskets at them while drinking tequila.

The elephants were kept in enlarged fences originally designed to keep horses in while feeding on wheat.

Many Volandians were singing and dancing, for they had won the war and gained victory over the inferior Carniuans. This caused the night to light up in the middle of the night. The Volandians were still partying. There were still the same number of Volandians 6 hours ago when the party started.

"UGH, I CAN'T SLEEP!" A Carniuan noble who had escaped clenched his pillow against his head to cover his ears because the party was too loud. Many people started going outside and started complaining, but the Volandians just pointed their guns at the civilians, too scared to fight, and they just walked away to their houses and tried to sleep again.

While in some houses, Carniuan women were being raped by drunk Volandians who barged into their houses, killed the husbands (which most of them had), and raped the women to submission. Some Volandians took children to rape out in the open, and nearby Volandians cheered as they saw their brother teaching the inferiors a lesson while downing alcohol or tequila.

Soon the party was dying down as Volandians began to collapse from being too drunk. The ones raping were still awake because they were still continuing to rape their supposed "sex slaves" till the morning when their balls ran out of juice.

What the Volandians didn’t know was that they were being spied on by several things; a satellite and a light ball about 3000 meters in the air. Watching through it were God and all his children except Michael, enjoying the Volandians' raping, drinking, dancing, and other fun stuff while Satan also watched behind all of them with a malicious smile.

Rebel evacuation fleet:

After Ivor, the leader of the Carniuan rebels, evacuated, he set course for America to seek help from there and defect for a while.

"Have you spotted anything?" Ivor asked the mana-scope man.

While Ivor had a glum expression on his face, they were running low on food and water, and if they didn't find the Americans quickly enough, they would perish at sea.

Just as Ivor was about to go back to the cabin, his comrade shouted, "UNKNOWN WYVERN SPOTTED NORTH OF US." He instantly rushed to the scope and looked at the wyvern.

"T-That’s not a wyvern!" After a few minutes, the unknown wyvern was in front of them.

Just as Ivor was going to present himself, the thing spoke.

This is the United States Navy. You are in American territorial waters. You are hereby now in our custody. Follow me to the fleet as you will seek asylum.

"What language is that?" Ivor asked, as he was confused about the language they were speaking, "Sir, you do not know how to speak Britannian?" Ivor nodded.

Ivor was enlightened after his comrade translated what the helicopter said.

"Perfect!" exclaimed Ivor. Alright men, follow that wyvern! "

As he said that, they set their course for the new world's first fleet.

Heaven —

The throne room of Yahweh—

Yahweh was sitting in his throne room, eyes closed, listening to his angels sing and play the harp.

He then heard a knock on his throne room's giant doors.

"Come in," he said, and Gabriel entered and kneeled. "Father, I have news," Gabriel said worriedly."What’s wrong?" Yahweh asked and was concerned.

"Father, we have found a new continent." Yahweh was amused, "That's good, but why did you sound cautious, Gabriel? This is great news. Yahweh was happy as he could make it his personal haven. "W-Well, we can’t open a portal there..."

Yahweh was shocked, "H-How?" Yahweh shouted, "Father, I don’t know, but I think there are signals in that specific place disturbing the opening of the portal." Yahweh was angry but calmed down.

"Ok, but please fix this. I want to set up a personal haven there since it sucks being here," Yahweh said in a straight-forward voice with no emotion, "Of course father." Gabriel then stood up and proceeded to leave the throne room.

"Ugh, how could this be? What’s disturbing the portal? "

Unknown to them, the United States is full of signals from satellites, television, the internet, and cell towers, and portals are formed with signals. Everything I just said disturbs the signal, preventing the angels from opening up a portal directly in the United States.

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