I admit defeat.

I hereby ask for forgiveness to every author of this small planet called Earth.

I admit that, reading such beautiful works on this site made me overstimate my abilities and to think of being able to write the story I have always thought of writing.

The past week I perused the chapters I published and I came to a conclusion: it was hell. I got goosebumps while reading them, I now understand how I gained a 0.5 rating!

Starting from the prologue, were I first wrote that his best friend suicided and then a few lines below i wrote that his body was found in a dumpster. (I corrected it)

In another chapter I mistaken I with HE because of the PoV change....

Another problem is the PoV change itself, it do not flow with the story.

In the end I solved the conundrum: I shall drop the story; it is too complex and long to actually write it down with isolated chapters, i have first to write it down! not only the important events like the MC died, the MC was enlighted here, etc... but a real draft of the story with details too.

Still I do not want to kill my story. I have the ideas, I have the mc, i have his past, his future and some of his Karma. So, more than dropped the correct term is indefinite hiatus, because i do not know when i will became enough proficient to write his history down. It is like trying to use the high-grade fire magic meteor with fire magic lev. 1

So I plead you to write in the comments all of your critics, even if harsh, to help me grow and learn the right way to tell my story