《King: The Silver King's Echo》Update
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Hey everyone!
Remember how I promised you guys to give you the chapter 22? Yeah, I guess you guys have to wait some more. Why is that? Well it's because I finally had a stranger to review it unbiased manner! I think you guys can see how it went.
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Unrefined. This is unrefined to the point where I can not say if it has been edited or not. Mistakes bordering on major are prevalent, the way that tenses are set up utterly confused me at points, and I really can't say I feel anything for the characters except for mild annoyance of them trying to talk like human beings.
Was that harsh? I really hope it was.
Anyway, this clearly does need some work. For the style, improvements could be gained with the help of letting others read it to offer up help in some form. Or maybe just let it lie for a few days before editing it. The brain clearly needs to be stopped from forming context by itself, because the readers don't have all the background knowledge. There are points where I really just couldn't understand what was happening, and that flaw needs to be fixed.
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Now, if you're gonna get mad, don't. I actually expected them to do so, and I'm happy that they were honest. So, after this review, I've decided to delay chapter 22 once more and go and try to improve my earlier chapters. Now, as a new writer, I'm really hungry for reviews. Heck, you guys can help too! It's okay to say "this series is shit" so long as you guys can back it up with REAL FACTS. When it comes to these things, I don't like sugar coaters.
Now, about my IRL situation... I can only say that things have taken for the worst. I'm sorry, but that's the only information I can disclose.
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Thank you guys for your continued support!
I'll also update this page from time to time to tell you guys when if I've finished improving the chapters. This is my progress so far:
Chapter 1 - finished; changes: some dialogue, fixed the use of tenses, added something that adds to the lore.
Chapter 2 - finished; changes: some dialogue, fixed some use of tenses, removed the mentioning of any EXP and changed it.
Chapter 3 - unfinished
Chapter 4 - unfinished
Chapter 5 - unfinished
Chapter 6 - unfinished
Chapter 7 - unfinished
Chapter 8 - unfinished
Chapter 9 - unfinished
Chapter 10 - unfinished
Chapter 11 - unfinished
Chapter 12 - unfinished
Chapter 13 - unfinished
Chapter 14 - unfinished
Chapter 15 - unfinished
Chapter 16 - unfinished
Chapter 17 - unfinished
Chapter 18 - unfinished
Chapter 19 - unfinished
Chapter 20 - unfinished
Chapter 21 - unfinished
Note: go to my scribblehub page, it's where I update the fastest!
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