《City States (Working title)》Revision in the works
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I'm sorry for the absence, I was rebuilding my world, cultivation system, races, characters, and frankly, y'all do not give feedback. I hope that you follow my story as I again write the first draft.
Again I'm posting here to hear what you think and what I need to improve. I don't need praise here, but it is appreciated, I need constructive criticism as you, yes the person reading this now, are going to be my target audience and if you are not satisfied, how can I make it as a writer?
Last thing. Thank you for the silent support and it gives me joy that despite it tackling the gender norms of a society, you still chose to read it. I hope you continue to join me on this journey.
Stay safe and be well.
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