Hello everyone I know it has been awhile since I posted a chapter but the reason being I have a lot of test to take and essays are due almost every week I thought I was going to be able to start over but guess what I’m going to go strong. I plan to rewrite the story but what I mean as in rewrite is that everything will be redone since I have had a poor reception with my writing skills but I think I have improved a bit.

This story starts off on the outskirts of capital city.

Today a child of mysteries is being born today.

There are two parents expecting their first child to be born today.

As the mother gets in the ready position she waits for her contractions to build up and she begins to enter labor.

“Jin” [[come on honey open your legs a bit more, I heard from the local mothers in the village that the more you open the easier it is too push the baby out so to say.]]

“Railin” [[Oi, why don’t you shut the fuck up and go look for Ben, he said he would be here when I was ready to birth my child. But he has been late for abut thirty minutes.]]

[[And as she says that JIn activates his Search magic!]]

“Jin” [[I have picked up on Ben’s signature he should be here in another few minutes.]]

[[And as he says that there is a knock on the door [bum,bum,bum] JIn, Railin I just got here can someone come open the front door?]]

As he says that jin rushes to the door to unlock it, [click] unwinding noise as the door opens with a low creek.

“Ben” [[you wouldn’t believe how bad it was this morning my wife was giving birth early in the morning before I had a chance to come here so I was a bit late.]]

“Jin” [well was it a boy or girl?]

“Ben” [well it came out as a boy but I really wanted a daughter for some reason. Idk I can’t put my finger on it.]

“Railin” [she yells, I know you guys are having a nice chat right now but could you hurry up and help me deliver this baby I feel like he’s going to shoot out any moment.]

They both rush to comfort her Jin holds her hand while Ben takes out the necessary utensils to clean and make sure the baby is healthy.

[Suddenly lots of blood spurts out Railin ******, her face begin to grow pale. Omg, the baby head poke out a bit and ben tells her to keep pushing.]

“jin” [[omg honey what’s wrong omg there is so much blood ben please tell me you can save her, I think she is letting out too much blood!!! If she lets out anymore she might die!!!!]]

“Ben” [ill do everything I can to save her and the baby so just wait, Ben cast an energy and health regeneration spell. I think she should be ok for a while but idk if there is anything else I could do I only know basic healing spells that can only regenerate health not get back loss of blood.]]

And as he says that the baby is half way out you can see Railin’s eyes begin to glaze over after her last push the baby starts to glow with a blueish golden light.

“[Skill: Magnetic push]”

Has been activated!

The new born baby encased in the blueish golden light shoots out like a bullet and lands dead center in the chest of Ben, his heart skips a beat and before he passes out he tries to hold on to the baby.

“jin” Ben? Hey been ben, wake up ben I need you to heal my wife she is dying on the bed here help! He stares at bens body lain across the floor carefully holding the baby.

Then all of a sudden the baby starts to cry, and the only thing it wants is the milk of his mother his instincts are crying for it when a black dot appears on hit little body and it begins to glow. And as he glow Railin’s body begins to glow as to the blood as well. Then another blinding light occurs.

“[skill: Magnetic Reversal]”

Has been activated!

And all of the sudden the blood on the floor and that is imbedded in sheets begin to congregate into a big ball of red and starts to rush towards Railin’s body it enters threw the female maiden part and enter back to her blood stream. As this is happening her skin color turns from deathly pail to a healthier glow of light brown and milky color. She falls asleep after this.

“Jin” [[omg what is happening a few seconds ago I could sworn my wife had been only seconds away from dying but now she is resting soundly in bed? This is so weird if it wasn’t me who healed her and it wasn’t ben since he is currently unconscious then who is it? ]]

As he thinks that he stares at his new born son who also is still glowing with a strange magic force.

[I have never felt this type of magic power before.]

But before he could investigate his son lying on the ground is till crying, so he picks him up. And tries to rock him so he could settle down and then he notices oh he must want mommies milk and as he says that he lifts his wife shirt and instantly as he puts his new born next to her a small static sound reverberates and zip he is happily sucking on his moms tit and before he can finish he falls asleep holding onto his mother.

Authors notes: everyone help me and tell me do you want me to start off from here are keep going from where I left of last time I have 10, chapters ready to be post till new week if you want. Its about 15000 words so tell me is this better than my first chapter enough to replace it.

I’m not changing the story I was just trying to change the way the dialogue looked but with a few major changes to the pace and story problems.

everyone tell me if this is better than when i first started and i am ready to start from here i just had a few problems with my college classes that made me take awhile