《The Beta Test》Problems
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So essentially I ended up with a couple problems. First, I got sucked into some political stuff I thought I had successfully commited to not getting involved in. Secondly I didn't have enough filler. Stuff happened in a compacted way that combined with my third mistake. Thirdly I ramped up the growth too fast. I'm not sure this was avoidable because I started out the character in a way that was too optimized. He was well along the path of glass cannon even in the first couple chapters. Which is an issue when you don't have other classes of characters.
Since you never really saw him when he was weak it also made it harder to appreciate the spell chaining situation.
All of this also contributed to the speed of writing. The math got very complicated very fast. Essentially in 3 days I got through roughly a third of the words I had planned to write.
Also I got sick and when I get sick my ability to actively use my brain diminishes significantly. I can read or even play certain kinds of games fine. I can even grind through physical labor, like I did at my last job even though I had various short terms of being sick or twisting my ankle or w/e. What I can't do is engage in mentally stressful activities.
My purpose was to engage in a writing exercise so I don't really have an interest in rewriting the story or anything. I had fun doing it, for all the flaws involved, and even though I can't really argue that I did a great job or lived up to my goals. My sleep/sickness issues and distraction related to other events definitely contributed to my issues with the mathematical mistakes.
I am sorry for not finishing the project though but better to cut it loose now than to dump it much farther in. I'd feel really terrible if I had dropped it when there was more going on plotwise and after people had potentially invested more time. ~30000 words is a relatively short story by RR standards.
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I definitely still feel like its possible to put out a litrpg story in a few days that isn't terrible and contains a complete and satisfying story and ideally which is distinct and engages in my preferred content style.
I am pretty over romantic tension, any sort of putting a love interest in danger stuff, and especially all the stories that involve the character always being subjected to other kinds of tension. Oh the main character has just resolved a key issue in a dramatic climax? Let me immediately shove them into the exact identical position they were in before so that they haven't actually improved their situation. Ugh. I guess that is often caused by the nature of a web serial. An endless escalation of dramatic tension to keep the story going.
In any case it looks like there weren't too many people invested in this story so that's probably for the best.
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