《Drunk Dungeon》Update
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Okay, so first I want to get some things off my chest.
I used to read a bunch of different stories over my life, plenty of fantasy novels, some sci-fi, maybe a few historical fiction and history books. The point is I loved to read a lot.
And as I grew older I started to write stories of my own. My first several were either fanfics taking blatant shitty turns or were books that should be burned and forgotten about. Yeah, my writing wasn't great. But as the years went on I started to get better, I outlined plots in my mind. Got better at organizing story elements, and got a clearer and clearer idea of what I wanted to write.
So I made one story and bonked that one hard. The story was fine, but I mixed up elements from one genre to another and didn't specify how they were related. I also lore dumped way too much on my readers every chapter, trying to squeeze very small details into the story when less large or intricate things could've done it just fine.
The point is, that my early writing attempts were sorta flawed in one way or another.
But then I made a story I liked and I felt other people liked it as well. I sorta got the hang of a story that second posted time. And I then started getting a bit burned out, so I wrote this one to help me recharge from that fiction.
But this didn't recharge me. First I made chapters way too long, around four thousand words to be exact. And that was seriously bothersome to write about and had the potential to be unhealthy for me. It was only last chap did I really see how tiring it was.
Then there's the fact that this story isn't going where I want it. I wanted it to be military dungeon core. But the story didn't achieve really anything on both those fronts. The descriptions of fights were too quick, the details of somethings not pandering out how I imagined, it was really just a mess.
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So here's my plan moving forward, I want to continue this fic in one form or another and I need your help to decide on how to do that.
I could A( Continue writing this fic like how I've been doing previously (this one is super unhealthy so I will probably skip it and choose the second-highest option) B( Rewrite this story and post the story separately in a different fic C( Delete all the chapters on the current story and replace it with the one's I either feel are good enough to stay in and don't mess with the new plot or finally D( Put this story on hold for now and focus on my other one till I finish it.
I really want your opinion on these options and which one you'd like me to pick. Hopefully, you have a nice day. Till next time, chow.
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Awaiting Angel - Larry Stylinson
"W-w'en w'll 'oo be b'ck, 'azzie?" "That's none of your concerns." Angelman Syndrome!Louis Businessman!Harry (Like always.)[Highest Ranking #730 in Fanfiction] Co-written with @AngleTheresNoHope (Paris)...This may contain some triggering things for some people. So please, read at your own risk. I have done my research on Angelman Syndrome but if I ever got something wrong or offensive please do tell me. Happy reading beautiful people! (: xxx - Ash & Paris© 2017 @lousbumtohazsdik & @AngleTheresNoHope
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