《The Other Labyrinth》Not a chapter - A true question
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So. Yeah. I just got a 1 star rating, making this novel fall sharply on the ranking, and making it lose nearly 0.7 of average rating.
I'm not making this post to present myself as a victim, nor to start a witch hunt to know who gave me this rating. Those things aren't important. This rating hurt me but, more importantly, it made me uncertain about this story of mine. His there a fatal flaw in this design that could make me understand why I got a 1 star rating ?
Here are a few things that could have made this rating like that :
- Poor mastery over the english language.
I know I'm not good at writting, and even more so in english, a language I self-taught me in. There is surely a lot of errors, mistakes in the way I build my sentences that make it harder or even painfull to read what I write.
- PoV jump.
That's was and still is a big concern for me since 1- It's difficult to do it the right way 2-RR is known to not like it and 3- I've a lot of character, so the screen time for each of them could be seen as somehow laking. That is true and the reason why I try to do full or nearly full chapters around a character now.
- Talking about heavy subject.
I already talked about rape and brainwashing so far, and other things like prostitution, war horrors and slavery will certainly make there appearance in here at some point. I know those are powder keg and to be treated very carefully, and not eveyone would want to read about them. That's why I put all the warning I could, in particular traumatazing content, so people would know what they were heading of when starting to read this novel.
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- Combats.
I'm no good to write battles and, therefore, all combat scene are training for me to become better in this. I know full well my combat aren't to most fluid or even natural, nor are they the most realistic, with sometime myself raising an eyebrow while looking at what I wrote.
- Plothole and incoherence.
I'm sure that there, somewhere, without me seeing it, there is some plothole. And, the same way, some incoherence. I try my best to keep it at bay.
So now I need you. If you're reading it, I can assume you also read the rest of what I posted. I need your feedbaks to know if there is a fatal flow in there so I can adress it. I don't want to be oblivious to a wound that could fester and, in the futur, make the whole story fall appart, I dread this but I can't do it alone.
Thanks for reading this post, I hope some of you will be able to help me make this novel better, since it's still only the first one I publish and I'm rather new to all of this.
Hope you have a great day.
Cheers ! ^^
(And this is really not to put me as a victim, I don't want to be seen as one. I really need your help ^^' Yes I know, I'm stressed, I needed to make it more clear, I apologize.)
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