《Tales of Astora: Legacy (FINISHED)》Discussion (NOT A CHAPTER)
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We are now half way through the first book of Tales of Astora: Legacy. I would like to thank everyone for your support for the last couple of months and all the comments and reviews that helped me polish this first fiction of mine.
I make this thread to address all negative (and also positive if there is ::) ) things that you have seen in this novel. Please say what you would like me to fix, improve or simply just keep the same here as I have drawn out the story for the first book but the one for the second one is still under development so this can help me to prepare in advance. Issues like grammar should be more careful, pacing faster or slower, etc.
Also I would like to listen to your theories about various subjects like who is the culprit behind the massacre 10 years ago? What is the deal of the Artificer with the demon? etc etc. One of the finest joys of being a humble author like I am is to see the reaction of my readers after each even. So if you have anything to share please go ahead!
Thanks again :)
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