《Not A Hero》Suggestions and critiques.
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This is here to let you know that I care about suggestions and criticisms, and would love to have some. It shows my wide and accepting heart towards readers and will occasionally(/often) show me rant out back. Be careful.
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Also tell me your expectations, it is difficult to betray them otherwise.
And I would love it if you can all pass your suggestions here, just so they are collected in one place and I don't have to search everywhere to steal them.
*sinister laugh* :keuhkeuh:
Just kidding, please give me your honest opinions/comments/ideas/etc here. It will help me improve my writing. English is not my native tongue so I would love to have mistakes pointed out.
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