《The Lightning Emperor》Author Questions
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Hey guys, I had a few extra chapters already built up while I was waiting to be approved. hehe
So, now, before continuing, I'll ask you guys some questions about the story and such.
1. I proofread chapters 1-3, but that's it. So, is the current quality in chapters 4-10 sufficient or should I take extra time to proofread??
2. More dialog, more description, or keep it the same?
3. Is the pace of the story fine? or should I slow it down or speed it up?
I'll read the suggestions and take them to heart, so reply with your honest opinions!
Thanks guys! - Kuroi Ikazuchi
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