《The Mad One》Input needed for Improvement
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Hey guys.
So following next week, I will be doing a redo of the start of the story on the side, up to chapter 17/18. Not to the standard that I am writing right now but instead my best attempt at professorial e-book standard.
And so I need things to improve. Of course, I've already got a good amount written down to improve but I'm sure there's tons more criticism that you guys are hiding away. I want it all. All of it.
Send it my way, please.
If it's criticism of the plot, try and stay between trials and Stanis leaving the temple in chapter 17. If it's on anything else, no matter how nit-picky or nasty it may be, just write it down for my case.
I'll expand upon the whole process and why I'm doing this and all of that next week but I thought it'd be nice if I gave you guys the chance to hurt me. So go for it. Do your worst.
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