《A Mere Fate of Mine》Somebody needs attentions

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This is not a chapter, but don't worry. Today is my holiday so there will be two chapters later.

Um, so... The context is that since the days I've been posting my novel on RRL which is exactly a month ago, I haven't received any 0.5-star rating before. I only got at most two 1 star ratings. However, just in these past 2-3 days, five people gave me 0.5-star out of nowhere. This causes my normally 4.31-4.34 rating to plummet down to 4.02- as of the time I write this and I feel like it will drop even lower in the future. So do you guys think this is normal or fishy?

And here I've been thinking why does this happen and what do they want. Even the review from Netlord only granted me 2 stars. Do they want attention? Alright, I'm giving you attention right now so if you are reading this, tell me what's your problem in the comment of this post.

Also, I want to answer the questions of some reviews I got. As I am not able to reply the review in RRL, I will do it in this post. For those who don't like my novel and agree with the review, um... please read my response.

First of all, the review from Netlord. Many people liked this review and even my first reviewer, Celsica, agrees with him. Netlord-kun, if you are reading this, please know that I'm not hating you. I appreciate your honest review and let me know your thoughts of this novel.

Black text is what Netlord says and the red one is my responses.

The grammar is terrible, flat out.

- Right, my grammar is terrible. I agree with you on this point.

The system seems to be just an excuse to give him power.

- In system novels, most of the systems exist to give people power. The system logs in the first chapter even said that the system is the tool to make people stronger. Moreover, the system in my novel is for everyone, not just mc. Any advantages mc gets, other people will as well.

Any difficulties are almost immediately negated.

- Well, it's not that all difficulties are totally negated. There are the consequences but I haven't shown it yet. Like the personality of Lucien after torture or how Alicia used all her power to cure Lucien in ch 22-23, the consequences are just lying in wait for the right time.

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The plot is full of cringy stereyotypes.

- Please be more specific or else I don't know how to answer. Which part do you mean?

It swaps between a serious and jokey tone.

- It is intentional as I find the mc who can smile in front of the difficulties is cool. It shows how strong willpower he has.

He has a hate for people of the abyss and then immediately forgets it.

- He doesn't forget it. You can reread chapter 21 in the last part. He still thought about taking revenge but didn't get the chance to. Only when he came back to Earth that he decided to not think about the people of Abyss. He was already back to Earth. You don't expect him to purposely find a way back to Abyss, do you? Well, it might be a bit of a spoiler but he will go back to Abyss in the future. (very far future...)

The characters are flat and feel ripped from other places.

- Please be more specific or else I don't know how to answer. Which part do you mean?

God the archangel is annoying.

- Aww, that's hurt. IMO, she is cute tho.

The massage joke is overplayed.

- What do you mean overplayed? There are only ch18 and 20 that have massage scenes. After that, although mc used Euphoria Touch and other massage skills, there is no massage scene or its jokes at all.

The luck path was just a deus ex machina.

- You're right. But let me tell you that everyone who gets summoned to another world will get this Luck Path. It's not specifically made for mc alone.

The archangel instantly negates all problems.

The archangel basically gives him free training.

The archangel makes him stupidly powerful.

- Not all problems. Well, it's free training but what's wrong is that. Even your friend would help you with a math problem for free! Mc isn't stupidly powerful. His power is currently around at 2nd class beings'. There will be the differences between Classes that Mc can't overcome, however, the gap between the first and second class isn't much.

MUH SPEAR IS GREAT WEAPON YES.

- I know, right?

The premise for the leaving of the world is a joke.

- There is a reason I sent mc to Abyss so it's not a joke. Abyss is also not a normal world either.

Why did his parents accept his return instantly?

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- Well, ch24 takes place in like a month after mc returned to Earth. He and his parents have time to accept each other. Also, I don't think anyone would want me to write more about how his parents accept him as it would be seriously boring.

Why did you randomly decide to do that stupid japan hs thing?

- If you read ch41, you will know why. The characters in JP hs arc will also play a big role in the future. Moreover, I want to make fun of JP hs cliches too.

Why did you decide to do the overplayed macho man japan hs thing?

- I don't quite understand what's your 'macho man' part thing means...

the japan hs thing is a stupid idea.

- Then which country do you think it's a good idea for mc to attend the high school? US high school? Well, I've been an exchange student to study in US hs for a year before so I know how it's like. However, I don't think it's interesting.

He shouldnt be able to kill people this powerful.

Why can a random ass kid with a knife oneshot high level people?

- I already wrote in the chapter that the high-level people are still a human. When they get stabbed into the neck by a sharp weapon, they will still die. Moreover, the people mc killed weren't tanker-related class either. Their endurance stat isn't that high. Also, every time mc killed someone, he always made use of the surprise element. He never fought head-on.

Why can a random kid be completely invisible to everyone?

- You referred to the high school arc, right? Well, it's because of his Mythical rank skill. He's also not only invisible to normal people but Gods as well.

The path system is half a joke and half serious (see massage, luck, and the true acting)

- Everything can be put in the 'path' no matter if it's a joke or serious, or even sounds stupid.

The True Acting thing was stupid.

Really stupid.

- How!??

He goes from willful driven man to whimpering child in seconds

He goes from whimpering child to impossibly driven man in a matter of seconds.

- Human's emotions are complex, dude. People can become sad and happy all of a sudden. Also, I already explained the reason for mc's change of emotion in the novel. Did you read or skim?

A normal kid somehow kills someone based off of looks alone and feels almost nothing.

- Okay, you didn't read or skim but 'skip'. Half of chapter 4 had already described mc's reaction to killing a person. And he didn't kill people based on looks, he was sharp enough to notice that the guy was up to no good. He knew the concept of 'There is no free meal in the world.'

He is smart when the plot needs it, but at other times intensely stupid.

- Example, please... If you referred you when mc got caught in ch13, I can say that he didn't get caught because he was stupid. He was always careful of his surrounding. However, his Eyes of the Truth skill level and his perception are still too low to guard for the people who were trained in tracking and stealth.

The grammar makes many things alot worse.

- I'm sorry...

Edit: What I mean by grammar is a good few typos, alot of words used wrong, and just the flow of sentances just being offputting and breaking of immersion.

That's all. Please understand that I'm not saying that I'm always right. I want to tell you guys that I'm showing you a story, not a plot line. There are many things that sound unreasonable to you but it's actually not. And I've no need to explain everything in the story, right? As it will show in the future.

Also, I want to say that there are only 43 chapters right now and it's not many at all. Ch1-23 is only a prologue and Pre-System arc is only a subarc. The real litrpg and stuff will start after the system hit the Earth which should be around ch60.

So the review from Bookkobolt that said: "Don’t go into this expecting an amazing litRPG adventure!", um, you can actually expect the litrpg in this novel.

Thanks for enjoying my novel until now. I know that my novel isn't perfect and there are many flaws in it. My grammar is bad and my style of writing is not up to standard. But many of you still support me, I really appreciate it.

I'm writing what I love and what I think is the best. The people who say I'm doing 'this' and 'that' ruins the novel please know that you are actually the one who ruin my novel, not me.

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