《Eleknar's Heir, The Infernal Prince (Demonic LitRPG)》Author's Second Note 8/12 - Chapter 46/47 redone
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Alright final author's note for the day before I start posting new content
I changed the chapters 46-47 back to the way I'd originally had it before I'd tried to make Trey more evil / mafia-ish. I edited out the part about Rivia being prostituded off with a scene from Ch. 47, I DID leave the scene about Trey killing those merchants. The edits are in green in ch.46-47, and it's a big difference in the story so I encourage you to go read them again. Tell me what you think - and if it still is a little much let me know. Basically, Trey lures them into the room with Rivia so they won't tell the guards / follow through on their threat to tell the gaurds if he doesn't do what they say.
(I'm still going to try and keep Trey as a very gray character / ruthless to those he dislikes, but I'll try not to have scenes like the one involving Rivia again)
Thanks for the input and again, if it needs to be cleaned up a little bit more let me know!
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