《Horizon》Author Acknowledgement
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The year is almost over and it's been more than two months since this novel first posted. Boy, it seems so long ago now.
I write this to address some of the problems that made known to me by the reviews. Thanks a lot for them by the way, I appreciate your opinions very much.
Grammar: I'm pleased to announce that my grammar is better than when I first started! (According to the reviews and comments... or am I just imagining it?) However, there's still much to be desired. It's far from perfect, far from great even. But I'll keep improving on it to deliver you smooth flowing words, not needles that stabs at your eyes :)
Grammar problems that I will focus on:
Odd and weak word choice. Repetitive sentence structures, especially in the beginning. Overly frequent wrong tenses.
Style: The Internal monologues are too frequent! Superfluous and needs trimming! A lot of philosophizing and justifications!
Got it, lads! Loud and clear. I will work on those!
...Did I miss something else? I'm sure you will let me know in the comments. ^^
Characters: Viers is too cold-blooded since the beginning! MC's reactions to being in danger aren't very realistic! MC has a severe case of chuunibyou! Secondary characters aren't very fleshed out! I don't feel any incentive to care about them (side-chars) in particular. It feels like the MC doesn't quite either, so why should I?
The early chapters are heavily focused on Viers and worldbuilding. The side-chars are few and very little screen time. Since Viers is a loner and socially awkward, he really did care very little to the people around him.
Buttt, it's not an excuse for writing a bad story. A good author should be able to show that Viers is lone-wolf while the other characters remain exciting and relevant to the story. Furthermore, MC's ruthlessness, unrealistic reactions, and any other inconsistency... It's all due to the author's lack of skill, no excuses. I apologize and will learn from it.
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Story: Most people feel it's quite good and worth exploring. Shows a lot of promise. Horaaay, thanks a lot guys! It seems my delusions can be used to entertain people instead of simply collecting mind-dust in my head :p
Of course, I also acknowledge the negatives. Such as 'the heavy expositions chapters without much going on.' (7-13 and 17-23 perhaps? I'm not sure)
Again, all due to the author's lack of ability and experience. I take full responsibility.
So, I got your messages loud and clear... Unfortunately, I won't rewrite the mistakes laden early chapters. Now I know people that wanted to rewrite their novels felt, it wasn't a good feeling.
m(_ _)m
This is my first novel, full of mistakes and imperfections, bland story and many people won't like it. But I gain precious experience by writing it and I'm sure it will benefit me in the long run.
I want... to write a novel and hope there are some people out there that enjoy it.
Happy new year 2020! Best wishes to all of you!
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