《My World To Live》Rewriting the Beginning
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I'm sorry to those who looking forward to a new chapter, >_
Although her backstory won't be poured out in the beginning still, the rewrite will substantially have more of it as well as her thoughts and emotions. Additionally, I noticed that in controlling her release of emotions or thoughts at certain times, she was becoming a stiff character that was hard to relate or connect to as a reader. This time around, I tried letting her "speak" to me more. In short, I got rid of some of the unnecessary mystery bits. I also tried balancing the visual descriptions more.
The events will basically stay the same, but I do reccomend checking out the rewrite as there is a considerable amount of new content. I don't have all of the beginning rewritten for today's weekly release (due to Easter and other work). I do plan to finish in the next few days, or at least before next week which will have a new chapter.
Please let me know your thoughts on the rewrite! 
Whether that's through a comment, rating, or review, I'd greatly appreciate the feedback. Like any writer, the silence can be concerning, haha.
Rewritten:
- Chapter 1 (Prologue || Infinity's Spell)
- Chapter 2
- Chapter 3
- Chapter 4 (End of Chapter One || Determination)
- Chapter 5
- Chapter 6
- Chapter 7
- Chapter 8 (End of Chapter Two || The Mirror World)
- Chapter 9
- Chapter 10
- Chapter 11 (End of Chapter Three || Nightmarish Chaffeur)
- Chapter 12
- Chapter 13
- Chapter 14
- Chapter 15
- Chapter 16 (End of Chapter Four || The New Earth)
- Chapter 17
- Chapter 18
- Chapter 19 (title changed to "Cyrienne")
- Chapter 20 (title changed to "Timeless")
- Chapter 21
- Chapter 22 (End of Chapter Five || Heart of Layered Walls)
- Chapter 23
- Chapter 24
- Chapter 25
- Chapter 28 (Chapter Six - 4 || Resolution; chapters 26-27 weren't story content)
All chapters are rewritten to adhere to changes in narration style, but some revisions will be lighter than others. All rewrites will be done on Tuesday along with a new chapter.
Cheers! :3
[04.29.19] And with that I'm done! Whoohoo~! No more rewrites! Even if I find fault, it'll just have to stay put until the end of the first book.
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