《Old Version - The First Magician》Not a chapter - also not dropped
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Ignore this chapter, I have decided against doing this for now.
Heyyyyy! I will start this the same as last time to assuage any worries - No I am not dropping the story nor putting it on hold for months on end nor starting another work.
So I know the story is still not super far along and I have only been writing it for less than a month but the amount of stuff I have learned about writing, storytelling, outlining, that I should design world systems that will be needed later ahead of time - just EVERYTHING is massive.
Thank you, everyone, who has offered me advice, feedback, criticism, other author's works to look at for examples and so on - basically anyone that left a comment or hit me up in Discord. I want this story to be great and as people are pointing things out and I am learning I have come to realize two major points.
1.) With the ways things are headed now it will be very hard to keep the story at a standard of what I would like. I failed to do some important stuff earlier on, such as actually having a defined magic system in place (yea I'm that dumb), and I would like to go back and fix these issues so that the story remains fun for me to write. In its current form, I am still enjoying the story and what I have planned but I do not think I can implement my plans well without adjustments.
2.) As some have pointed out, and again I love it it's not a bad thing, my writing is not the best. The one guy on chapter 5 who left a nice big comment for me introduced me to a basic of writing I didn't even know and have since read lots about techniques related to showing and not telling. Implementing this in the current chapters will be a BIG change to the feel of the writing and will enhance the reader experience greatly.
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So, I am going to take some time and begin another rewrite (for those of you not with us before, I did a rewrite around chapter 10) and I have no idea how long it will take. I will keep you guys updated in my Discord as well as on this post. I have a nice big list of stuff to change, fix, adjust, look into and so on and plan to start as soon as I am done typing this.
I'm sure some will be disappointed and leave, and I am sorry I ruined a fun activity for you, but I am very much enjoying to write but can't see myself enjoying it much longer as things are. Feel free to ask questions, give your own ideas/suggestions/changes/fixes and so on. I am about to go back through and read EVERY comment on EVERY chapter again and note down the contents and pluck out what seems of use.
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8 98Just Flip a Coin, Otherworlder
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8 108The Chronicle of a Witch
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Welcome to the wonderful world of oneshots! Come in and take a seat my fellow female doms, we clearly don't get enough appreciation in the world of fanfics. But! Time has changed to where we now have our own power to create. Which is exactly what I did, feel free to give requests (ONLY ON THE REQUEST PAGE!). Enjoy, relax and enjoy the show.WARNING: SEXUAL ACTION TAKES PLACE IN MOST CHAPTERS!DO NOT ENTER IF YOU ARE NOT COMFORTABLE WITH THAT OR NOT OF LEGAL AGE TO BE READING ADULT CONTENT!
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