《Messummer (Capstone Writing Assignment)》Writer's Speaks/Inspiration/Questions for Improvement
Advertisement
My Writer's Speaks:
Honestly, this piece was very hard for me to write. I've wanted to write a story about dinosaurs for so long, but I was always so scared, because I've offended people with this sort of material before. That's not this story's intention at all. It's just a sci-fi adventure piece with a twist.
What made this story hard was just all the research I had to do for it. It delayed it, so I got a late start, which proved to be very difficult with the time crunch and page limit for my class (twenty-five). I wanted to give up multiple times, but I always pushed myself to keep going. My goal was to toss in everything I've learned about writing since 4th grade into it, so I went to extreme lengths in order to pull Messummer off.
Dan is my favorite character, partly because I based him off my dad, whose name is also "Dan". That doesn't mean I don't love Messummer, too. These two characters came very naturally to me, because I knew what I wanted their story arc to be from the very beginning.
That said, the plot wasn't that difficult–not as difficult as Evangeline's Flame, at least (the other story I had to write for my class). To help with it, I watched a documentary on the K-T Mass Extinction. I was severely disturbed by it. I felt so bad for the dinosaurs, but I thought the extinction would be an interesting concept–one that you don't normally see in dinosaur stories. I tried to keep the disaster scenes at a minimum, in case people were uncomfortable with reading about animals trying to survive.
I threw some things in from my personal life, too. The death of Dan's mother mimics my brother's death, as well as Dan's lesson about moving on and accepting where he belongs. I wanted Messummer to be his mother's spirit, but I had a bit of trouble pulling it off. If you guys could give me suggestions on how to make this paranormal sub-plot work better, please do not hesitate.
Advertisement
Before I move on, I just want to say something really quick. I know the time traveling rules are bent in this story, but that's what I wanted. It was the only way to make Dan and Messummer's relationship work. Sometimes you have to bend the rules. I do that all the time when I write, but I still get called out for it.
Other than that, I hope you enjoyed Messummer.
Questions for Improvement:
1. Dan and Messummer are both important characters, so I considered writing the story from both their point of views. But with the time crunch, the page requirement, and late start of this story (due to all the research I had to do for it), I ended up writing from Messummer's perspective. What do you guys think? Should I write the story from both Dan and Messummer's point of views?
2. How can I make the paranormal sub-plot work better, with Messummer being the spirit of Dan's mom? I tried to include subtle details of it, but do you think I can add a few more? I want to make it not as obvious as Axis's secret in Evangeline.
3. I'm still new to sci-fi, so I'm wondering what's working and what I can do to improve in this genre?
Advertisement
- In Serial35 Chapters
The Hero of the Valley
A progression fantasy with LitRPG elements.Duncan grew up in an isolated valley, determined to become a hero of legend. Chosen by the Gods, he is thrust into a world he knows little about and must grow stronger to face powerful invaders from other worlds.
8 263 - In Serial985 Chapters
Hidden Marriage With My Imperfect CEO
Anya dreams to have a simple, and peaceful life. However, there has only been misery in her life. This beautiful girl must work hard Every day to support her mother and herself.
8 2443 - In Serial15 Chapters
T.L.C.W - A Meeting of Souls
Harry Potter has lived nine lives, each time failing to complete his true destiny. However, the fault doesn't lie solely with him. Betrayed, manipulated, and eventually enslaved by those he loved and trusted, success was always beyond his reach. He knows something has to give. He's willing to do just about anything, even if it means changing everything. But he can't do it alone. He'll need allies, and perhaps a real shot at love if it's not too much to ask. Follow Harry as he navigates the afterlife and gears up for the Final Attempt to save his world.
8 183 - In Serial10 Chapters
Two Nations in another world
As the United States of America and its Pacific allies prepare their military against the People's Republic of China and a new President was elected in 2024, scientists discover a large object falling into Japan and the US, they discover a new world has appeared and replaced the old one around them, what will happen next?
8 60 - In Serial27 Chapters
Date of Dawn
Time is running out! The world of Nelen has taken to using time as a literal energy resource. The more it's consumed, the less there is of the future to experience. This will eventually lead to an apocalypse known as the Dawn. A meeting between an adventurer, a rich girl and a petty thief in a nowhere fishing town might just be what it takes to tip the scales though. Unfortunately for our heroes, they're dogged every step of the way by mercenaries, criminal empires and the agents of megacorporations on their quest. Will they elude capture and accomplish their goal, or fall prey to their pursuers? Welcome to Nelen: a world running on borrowed time.
8 168 - In Serial28 Chapters
Dawn Of The Lilies
Born with no feelings or emotions. Jungkook is left with his notebook to explain the reactions of others until a dare changes everything. With a new found view, will he be able to take on the Dawn of the Lilies?💜 2nd Place Jungkook Solo- Golden Maknae Awards💚 3rd Place Fantasy - Best BTS Books Award💧3rd Place Jungkook- Tear Awards 2020⭐️ Honorific Mention- 21st Century Awards 2020#BTs21heartkeyAwards#21stcenturyawards2020
8 248

