《BROKEN CHAINS》(Please read)Update, may take a break to actually force myself to rewrite things
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Hoi!
Chapter 41 is almost done I'm just waiting for one of the editors to look it over (I'm still happy for more people to join) Chapter 42 is also almost done.
After that I might actually take a break for a week or two, I'm actually a bit fearful of that tbh - we have close to 800 followers now, and I don't actually want to make anyone wait or be angry about slowness - I think that I've gained many followers because I update semi-regularly.
I've got a few confidence jabs the last few days, and I'm considering just blocking each comment that just talks about Forge of Destiny, tbh. I simply do not want to hear about that story again.
But the real reason I want a break is to force myself to rewrite a whole bunch of chapters. Many people tell me I'm telling a story rather than showing (And while I don't know why that is so bad, I trust in all the people that tell me it is and I will seek to find a resolution to it .) I'm after all barely an amateur - this is the first time I've written anything that I was barely confident enough to put out into there world. ((Shi Shi's story I may release in an extra chapter at some point after some excessive rework.))
Even one of my friendly editors told me that as I handed in the first draft of chapter 41 so I rewrote part of it with his input.
I also don't really want to continue as it is right now - I think I've actually improved a little bit over the close to 50 chapters that are out at the moment. And I think the older chapters make my story look worse then it is. ((I also need to cut out any MENTION of a moon, because of "holy shit. fod has moons in it"))
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I think you can tell that I'm a little fed up that almost every 2th review mentions that story somehow...Uh. I just see it even if it is good and get dispirited, as it is NOT a copy of anything it's mine and mine alone, people mentioning it being a copy even in a good way are just hurtful.
I'm very very sorry for anyone that is expecting the usual an update every 2-4 days - it may not happen for the next week or two - I will still put out 41 and 42 and I have the outline for 43 and 44 done already, so I might do these when I get too depressed from fixing up the earlier chapters (Fixing your own writing is seriously painful)
And after I'm done we can hopefully all together step into a happy new future!
Gonna leave this rant with a few pictures, please leave your thoughts
A Young Shi Shi
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Kou of the future?
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