《Dante's Immortality》Short break
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Writers block, yay.
Going to take like a month off to recharge (ill be back, dont worry lol)
I need to get a certain character count to post a chapter, so i guess ill get a bit detailed.
Basically, i think what has me all blocked up in regards to the story is what ive already written, and not so much what i am about to write. By that i mean the last 60ish chapters. I feel like they are bad, real bad. There is nothing really driving the story, and although i am preparing to fix that now, there is a 100k+ word deadzone there.
I have a few ideas to resolve this. All of them are going to take a decent amount of rewriting as well as some minor plot tweaking to make it a more enjoyable story. Like jace, for instance, doesnt really matter. He is an arranged fight, not really someone Dante wants to defeat, nor is there enough buildup to make the fight really interesting. Then there are some moments with melisandre, olivia, the city Sloria, and the whole mercenary fighting thing that need to be revised, skimmed, or just changed. Basically, i think it would be healthy to cut down the word count of the last 60 chapters by like 50%... which would be easier said than done.
Dont worry though, im going to take a minute to sit back, think about what i want to adjust, probably practice my writing on useless things, then come back and start plugging away at new chapters again.
And of course, if you guys have any input you want to share on this, please comment.
(And i also understand if some people dont want to read a story that keeps being changed/edited as it is being written :/ sorry about that)
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