《Saga of the Soul Dungeon - Old》Edits - Can of Worms
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So I know I might regret this, but I am currently going back through, making notes of any promises I implied in the story and editing along the way.
That being said, I am opening up this space for people to make suggestions and comments on how I can improve continuty, characterization, spelling, grammer, and anything else that people think can be improved.
One thing I seem to get marked down on for reviews is either story or characterization.
If I am not getting things across as well as I should be, then I will take happily take suggestions.
Also, I will to renow my ever present plea for ratings and reviews. Trust me, I live for these things.
You guys are awesome,
Foxmoor
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