《The Iron Teeth: A Goblin's Tale》Explanation of Current Events
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Okay everyone, here is an explanation of what I've been up to lately and why there have been no recent releases. I'm very sorry about that but I've just been very busy.
I have in fact been working on the story but not on writing new chapters. Instead, I'v been trying to improve the first half of the story. Your feedback would be much appreciated.
I really feel that I've improved as a writer since I started and thus I've been editing the first few arcs. On top of just general improvements I've also been trying to bring it up to e-book quality and format.
Below is a timeline for the story as it stands now. I had a much rougher timeline I was working from but as I actually wrote the story a lot changed. This is my first big writing project and I had no idea how to pace everything as I wrote. The Iron Teeth has turned out to be much longer and slower paced than I initially planned so some things need shifting around.
Current Timeline: Warning Spoilers
The Road North
Merchant caravan in cage, thinking back to sewer life
Bandit attack, freed by Saeter
Training to do chores
Meets Vorscha and Garalhd
Goes out to get rabbits and sees harpies
Meets Herad, reason for staying
Out hunting for deer and spiders
Sneaks into party and gets drunk
Honor Among Thieves
Wakes up with hangover
Rides Wagon and practices tying cord
Stop for the night
Does a lot of chores, skinning, smoking, gets knife and leather
Hunts with trap and sling
Bullying followed by Gerlahd and Herad fights
Goes out to get snares and slime fight
Search for cave and Mimic attack, goblins
Merchants arrive and trade, Blacknail steals key
Herad goes out to raid weapon shipment
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Boar attack and disappearances
Raid returns with casulties
Ghoul infestation and battle
Blacknail sniffs out infection
Written in Blood
Becomes a hobgoblin
Beat up by Saeter and given a sword
Kills bandit at latrine
Khita is recruited
Training by Vorscha
Red Dog and Saeter attack deserters
They end up in tight spot
Blacknail sneak into deserters, kills leader
They recruit deserters, mage, prisoner woman
Troll Attack
Follow Troll back to it's lair and kill it
Returns to camp, see goblin
Along Twisted Paths
Herad and Saeter go North to Daggerpoint
Red Dog left in charge of camp for winter
Blacknail follows Saeter
Drake and Ogre Stampede
Runs into travellers
Run into goblins and fights harpies
Teaches goblins stuff and improves lair
Gets lost, uses human trap, and asks for directions
Arrives at Daggerpoint and scales wall
Den of Beasts
Stalks through alleys and explores.
Meets Luphera and gets information
Khita is ambushed and he intervenes
Follows her back to base and overhears Herad
Decides to kill her enemies
Visits Luphera and gets info
Sneaks into Fang's base and kills him
Runs back to his tribe and presents Herad with Fang's head
Visits Avorlus with Mahedium and they return with deal
Failed attack on them by thugs
A Tradesman's Tools
Wakes up in room
Training with Herad
Elixir from Avorlus
Under bed next morning
Goes out shopping and finds mask
Sent to kill Galive with Saeter
Kills him and avoids Malthus
Hears footsteps on roof while sleeping
Assassins and Malthus attack Herad at night
Blacknail kills some and chases rest back to Luphera's
Sneaks in, kills man, and meets Luphera
Alarm is raised and he is convinced to kill man for Luphera
Fights guards and assassins then duels with Malthus
Flees through window but has to climb back inside
Hides in closet until Luphera kicks assassins out
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Queen of Swords
Goes out with Saeter to recruit
Run in with street children
Hears about ghouls but it turns out ot be Avorlus' men
He is a bloodmage
Saeter confronts Herad and Mahedium
Preperations for war and construction of barricades
Zelena summons mercs and starts attack
Hired thugs fail to take barricade after Mahedium blasts them
Mercs advance and blow hole in barricade with mage
Head falls back and sets wall alight
Mercenaries are pushed into flames and defeated
Assassins start targeting Herad's archers
Blacknail is sent out to stop them
Lures Malthus into overgrown land.
Uses traps and ambush to kill assassins
Blacknail goes back to battle.
Sees Saeter fighting and dives in to save him
Meeting of remaining bandit chiefs
On top of a lot of editing to speed up the pace of the first few arcs I've been thinking about adding a new arc in after Written in Blood. The point of this would be too make the first half story more self contained and like a novel; so it has a clear beginning, middle, and end that gives readers more of a sense of progression. Again, this is also to fix the really slow pacing of the story at the start.
Some ideas I've been throwing around for this are:
Finding the cave and a battle with a powerful mutant, such as a giant snake.
Build up the world more naturally with resorting to interludes.
An attack by the knights from the beginning of Written in Blood to show more about nobles and society.
Very action heavy arc with lots of chaos.
Shows Blacknail's character and social status growth.
Sets up the war in Daggerpoint
Earlier introduction of unique Elixir powers
Tell me what you think and about any ideas you have!
Another big thing I've been thinking about is rewriting the prologue to make it more relevant and have a bigger hook. A good story needs to get people's attention in just the first paragraph and I'm not sure my current one does that. Some readers have also complained about it being so long and the shift in perspective, and they have a point.
New/Changed Prologue: The Shattering of Ways
Blood poured from the man’s wounds onto the cold ground beneath him. He was dying and beyond help now. He choked and gasped as bitter blood clogged his throat but he fought to hold still and at least die with dignity. In his last moments, and in front of all these witnesses, he wasn’t going to go out thrashing around like a fish out water. Burn that!
He refused to have regrets, even though he had never gotten what he’d wanted out of life. He had done the best he could and died for what he’d believed in! His would be the last laugh anyway.
He could still feel the inhuman eyes that watched and blazed with hate. The dying man tried to chuckle but all that came out was a weak gargling cough. The fools had no idea what they’d unleashed! They couldn’t see how the world had changed and turned against them.
As the man’s vision grew dark, scenes from his past began to play out before him. His last breath rattled through his teeth and he couldn’t help but think back to how it had all began…
The point here is to shorten the really huge and not completely relevant prologue I have now and really get it to grab peoples' attention in only a few sentences. The story is just so long now that keeping the same prologue wouldn't make much sense. I'll probably re-add it as an interlude.
If you have any ideas or criticisms for any part of the story I would love to hear from you. It would be really helpful to hear from all my readers about what they think makes my story strong and what makes it weak.
The more input I get the faster I can get this out of the way and get back to new chapters!
-ClearMadness
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